Graying shadows held gently back
lone dim light
The chair in the corner
Touched by dark
G r a y i n g s h a d o w s p u s h f u r t h e r
lone dim light
The chair
The corner
T o u c h e d b y d a r k
S a v e d b y l i g h t
Huddled child
Shivering cold
Touched by dark
Huddled child
Seeing phantoms
Saved by light
No more holding
No dim light
Ink black shadows
Piercing fright
T o u c h e d b y d a r k
The chair
The corner
S a v e d b y l i g h t
Open window shadows come
Broken light
The chair is rotted
The corner cold
Ink black dark
Chair
Corner
Huddled child
Piercing fright
T o u c h e d b y d a r k
Saved by light
Peace of mind for huddled child
Phantoms come and enclose
The child stands, standing boy
Standing boy is not afraid
Standing boy
Sees no phantoms
Touched by dark
Standing boy
Feels no fear
Saved by light
The chair is rotted
The corner cold
Window open
No dim light
S t a n d i n g b o y l e a v e s d a r k r o o m
Chair
Corner
T o u c h e d b y d a r k
Huddled child
Standing boy
S a v e d b y l i g h t
A contest entry
- Show me how good you really are. by EntombedCrystalRose.
300 points, ended April 22, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
Comments
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A masterful piece of work, and a brilliant read. Thank you for entering!
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Wow you've really got something special here! Great imagery and the rush of words pulls you right through to the end which I guess is almost a beginning. Great work.
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Inspiring!
I do like the poem, sweetie. I did have a hard time trying to think of what it was exactly about and what it exactly meant. But all in all, it was a sweet poem and I think you got down the concept of what you were telling me... how in English, they tell you to analyze the poem and whatever. It can definitely have many meanings... and like Carrie said, it could be about suicide if one thought that way.It could also be thought of you overcoming something in your life or the speaker's life. Well, what ever the meaning, it was still an amazing poem. I do hope you write more like this!!
<33 Your Kitten
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