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when winds yawn
and lights are sleepy -
you, touch me.
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A contest entry
- prompting you by Lavender Butterfly.
420 points, ended April 12, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Most beautifully said, in such short amount of words.
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This is a very beautiful poem. There is little said, but a lot taken away from this piece. Particularly hope and inspiration, perhaps even nostalgia. It conveys many strong emotions, and I applaud you for expressing something like this is such short lines.
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Wow, this touched me; lol and congrats on your trophy which is well deserved
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revisiting
still love this one
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Wow
So economic and so loud. I love this.
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This was what is perfect about quickies. You brought depth beauty and golden imagery to life. A marvelous write.
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Beautiful lines.A well deserved Gold, Ros
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you are such a master at short verse, Hensley. this one is absolutely beautiful!!
~ Nicolette
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I adore this....sigh~
Lynda
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Wow..worth a Gold for sure...such a different look at an old subject. Beautifully done.
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ha i saw 50 lines and expected some poem with meat on forgive me but i am not one for these short expressions you are like tara with the short poems, me i have a different view
Martin, Rebecca And Dolly
With gentle sorrow's lazily flapped wings
attached to her mouth, she pondered awhile,
the shape of an O painted her lips red.
How could she tell such innocent blue eyes,
without pain's dull edged sword slicing her heart,
the sad news that she had just overheard.
"Mother's dead..." And that was all she needed
to know that life would never be the same.
She pulled up her hair and tied it in silk.
"Dear Dolly, I regret to inform you
that our mother has gone to visit God."
"Mother's dead wrong for thinking I'll fix it,
I told her that brand would break down quickly."
Said Martin to his brother Jonathon,
little realising that Rebecca
had heard their emotional tones vibrate.
"I'm a big girl now," she says to Dolly,
"tomorrow I will find work, but for now,
let's have some tea and cream cakes on the lawn."
And as Martin appears, to check on her ~
"Daddy, Daddy, do not be sad, I'm here,
to look after you now Mummy is dead."
Realisation strikes his cheek with force,
be careful with words when children are near.
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This is one of your best works!!! This is perfect! Short, yet marvellous! "yawning winds" and "sleepy lights"... ahh, so beautiful that it makes my heart do the "tingle"... (that happens when I read good poetry, lol)
Brilliant
- namita
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Very Good. I love it!
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omg - this is my favorite poem of yours...this is gorgeous...
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