Can you hear that?
The tearing,
The ripping,
The screaming.
Can you see that?
The bleeding,
They're slipping.
It's demeaning.
Can you feel that?
The scratching,
They're grip,
Their breathing.
Can you taste that?
The bile,
The blood,
Their flesh.
Can you smell that?
The carnage,
The absolution,
Their death.
Author notes
I don't know if it's any good, or if it makes sense, but I made it up in English class.
Kind of liked it.
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wow ur a really talented writer i love this! pls read sum of mine if ur up 2 it? wel done tho this is awsome
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very clever
This is a very clever poem I really enjoyed it. Awesome write keep up the good work! -
Wow, that really did appeal to all of the senses. I can just hear the ripping and the screaming. I can see the bleeding. I can feel their grip, the scratching. I can take the bile and the blood. I can almost smell the death. The imagery was quite unique, but in a good way. Your English teacher will be more than likely scared! lol Nice job!
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awesome
that was AWESOME i loved how it made my skin feel the words!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Fukking awsome
Oh my god.....awsome poem.....i dont think i read a better poem.....awsome write...its so emotional....and deep....my god...i wish i had your talent....this is awsome...awsome fukkin write.
Sincerely,
Shysuicidalwolf
Aka Todd
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Wow there lassie. Explosive in carnage of ripped emotions and toren soul's cries. I love it. its amazing. brillant in very colorful ways and deep ironic emotional states. Its very descriptive as well and deep. And one thing lassie, theres not one work any writer writes thats horrible or aint good to anyones likings cause always..always theres a handful of living eyes that stand out and see the rising potential within you. always. Remember that.
Great write Lassie.
Sincerely,
Deathwolf Tasagka
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