I would have wings and ruffled feathers,
eyes bright as glass beads, claws sharp
enough for hanging on and holding to~
I would like to know how a dove knows
to mourn a day going missing
and how to coo through heat
and how to press my heart
down on bough by beak~
I would like webbed feet for paddling
against undertows and still look
serene as if no work was done at all~
Could I be granted
a single gliding moment of an eagle
so I could carve the world a rainbow?
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A contest entry
- Free Verse or Prose Prewrites by Randomly Beautiful.
475 points, ended April 14, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I really have no critique. This is lovely. The imagery is wonderful. Thank you.
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"Could I be granted
a single gliding moment of an eagle
so I could carve the world a rainbow?"
I would say you have been granted many of these moments, as I have watched you soaring, in awe. Gorgeous. 
Wanda
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hey, nice eagle, I may steal it some day (and give the source, of course!) OH, this 'not a sonnet' contest... let's see what you have... yes, it has the tone and sentiment of a sonnet without bending to the rigid rules... let's see how you fare...
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Oh so beautiful . . . it touched me in those deep places of longing in the heart . . . thank you Carol, for poetry like this is a gift to those of us who hunger for a sanctuary of serenity in this sorry old world.
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a very moving piece ... thru the stanzas, one sees the vivid nature of experience and the connection we strive for. beautiful layout, also. thanks.
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Beautiful Poem--Beautiful verses--Beautiful artwork & Presentation!---Well Done!
Good Luck to you in the contest!
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This is nice ...
and it's also a sonnet, even though it doesn't rhyme. I'd suggest you enter it in cricketjeff's contest for unconventional sonnets.
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