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When we were..

To refrain from light is to understand
that without you, I never was,
without me, it would’ve never been,
and without him, no words can ascribe…

I shut out you, the world and I
living us non existent, only to rise back
from were no words shall reach…
to a symphony of thought, to intention,
creation, universe. My eye lids open,
back to creation…

When we were never separated,
we paced within the gardens of
existance as we created, kissing
the forever misunderstood angel
of change.
Constantly dying away
to all the things that we once
thought dear, the prisons we once
feared, the illusions we once created.

The seas then caught our petals falling,
and we danced to the sounds of the ripples
turning them to waves as I called out
to your name, only to hear it in your
ears once again as we both answer to it
we both called out to it.

Why then should we die when death
always creates us?
And pain returns to emptiness.

forever is what we have.

Time was when we imagined
When we were lost to whom
We were, why we where.

This moment
Eternal, were everything returns
As it reaches back to emptiness,
were everything already sits and waits.
Where we already were...


 

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image: http://www.asylum.pri.ee/files/scn.jpg

the connection of everything and how eternal life is.

bless.

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  • Poetrist
    July 26, 2009

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    Very nice. I was blown away by this and at lost for words. A trophy was well deserved on this one. I cant really pick a favorite line, but if I had to my favorite lines would be:

    "I shut out you, the world and I
    living us non existent, only to rise back
    from were no words shall reach…
    to a symphony of thought, to intention,
    creation, universe. My eye lids open,
    back to creation…"

    Very deep!


    • Blac-sol
      July 26, 2009
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      thank you so much for your lovely comments Poetrist.. i'm glad you liked this script..

      be bless till we meet..

      blac.


  • Sandygram silver member
    July 23, 2009

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    Stunning Poetry

    I am in awe of your writing. The imagery was excellent and took the reader on a journey back through time.Time has no beginning or end, it just is! A pleasure to read.

    Take Care, Sandy


  • The MisSin Truth
    April 16, 2009
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    beautiful

    Why then should we die when death
    always creates us?
    And pain returns to emptiness.

    wow


  • Neo.Love.Soul
    March 11, 2009

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    I am so impressed by you. Your words leave a person breathless and amazed. How do you do that? You have a very special gift. I will definitely have to push myself to get on your level.

  • shellybabz
    July 2, 2008

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    i love it!!! I can understand whatt you saying caus i wrote something on this but expressed differently,,mine is called 'Angel in disguise'., Brandy sangg datt sonng,..

    okayy so this is how i understnd whatt ur writtin,,,my interpretation of the whole poem. "when we were"- is the heading,,and just by readin it its an incomplete sentence emphasising an incomplete relationship, a lost love..it also emphasises somthing that happened in the past caus the heading is past tense..

    The first stanza,,seems to show how much of an impact this person had on u 'without you i never was'.. and the relationship was destroyed by someone else ' without him no words can ascribe'.

    This is ma favourite line "Why then should we die when death always creates us?"kinda the cycle of life that with a birth therzz a death.. or inorderr for us to live people must die,,or else there would be a mass over crowding.. or from a spiritual point of view death is not the end,its the beginning,kinda like eternall life through death... its like the saying "to die is to live"/... but since this is about lost love id sayy in this context that sentence is like saying that inorder to love someone else, something in you must die ,you have to experience pain,, so that you never want the one you love to experience the same..so a death inside creates a new side to a person...


    this poemm to me is definately about a lost relationship!! i looooooooooovee it,,,also i like the wayy u use nature and create a visual picture, "The seas then caught our petals falling,
    and we danced to the sounds of the ripples"

    I also like this "My eye lids open,
    back to creation…" kinda lik how love can be blinding.. but when its over ur eyelids open/...

    GREATTT WORKKK

  • loutariro
    May 21, 2008
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    you are geting better at this every day.i really like this one


  • cgirl0410
    May 3, 2008

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    Wow, I didn't know you were posting again. You slipping Blac. LOL. Or rather I'm slipping. I haven't been on the site for a while. Wow, this piece...was sooooooooooo...I'm speechless. Your thought processes. What I took from this piece is the circle of life. Correct me if I'm wrong, LOL, which from time to time I am. LOL. But it seemed to be exploring what we are, where we come from, where we go when we're done, back where we came from to begin with. Powerful stuff. Deep thoughts. Wise soul. Later. - cgirl0410 (you know the name)


  • maa gold member
    April 16, 2008

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    thank you for this truly wonderful and inspiring verse that embraces in a simple and tangible manner many concepts dear to indian philosophy (and not only indian ...)
    I could see myself journey back to the beginning of time ... before the manifestation of the universe from pure consciousness ... before shakti's birth - reposing in shiva's peaceful lap ...
    you have created an all-encompassing space through your poem where we all can enjoy the bliss of here and now ...

    thank you,
    maa

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