So foolish we mortals
be,
looking for land when
there is but sea.
Always wanting that
which is more.
Say, expressing feelings
unknown to the heart before.
Such complicated creatures
floored by simple things
like speeding hearts, first kiss
and golden rings.
Searching for so called
love true...
Yet I'm loving the imperfection
known as you.
Author notes
Do I need notes? well...if I do...well...idk...
A contest entry
- Liebe und Streiten by swimfallen09.
300 points, ended April 12, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comment please...if you like it, if you don't. Please comment.
Comments
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well said!
you deserve gold for this one
my favorite lines:
Yet I'm loving the imperfection
known as you.
this shows insight beyond what a lot of people seem to have. often it's a case of 'accept me as I am, but I will not accept fault in you'
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I like the fact that in places the word order is a bit odd, it makes the reader pay more attention. The simple things part adds a lot to this write. I love the last two lines. Thank you for sharing.
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"So foolish we mortals be..."
...wonderful opening line and could go anywhere and on and on as it truly is the story of humanity, of life and death and love and loss and all the things that have gone to define our nature....very nicely done...good luck in contest....
amicus...
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