My closet,
my secret place,
is my favorite place in the world.
I crawl under the bottom shelf,
and it welcomes me with a comforting hug
and doesn't let go until I decide to leave.
No matter how I'm feeling,
whether it is happy, sad, frustrated, or overwhelmed,
it's always there
with open arms.
and when I'm not there,
it waits, patiently,
for me to return.
My closet,
my best friend,
will always be there to listen.
Author notes
My closet really is my favorite place to just sit and think. This actually started out as and English assighnment, we had to use personification with something that comforts us. So...I turned it into a poem!
Missa
A contest entry
- Dark Winnings by SuicidalLover.
400 points, ended April 16, 2008, 13 entries
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Comments
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It really is good. Like whisper said we all need our own little place where we need to just think and get away from other things that bother us. Again great write.
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Good poem, we all need our own space to just be able to sit down and chill. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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Nicely written piece. Always good to have somewhere to go thats safe and comforting. An excellent theme. Thanks for entering and good luck
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aww a confet place is always a good thing to have
im glad you have it
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I like this; it's very distinctive. Made me wonder who was writing. Perhaps a child? Or maybe a cat. Someone small who likes to curl up.
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uhm...me. it's from me. when i was younger, i would always sleep and do homework in my closet. i was a weird little kid lol
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I enjoyed how you seemed to give a life to your closet. This made me feel kind of sad though I am not sure why. Nice write> Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Lol i like this! Closets are cool lol. I like that you turned this into a poem from a school project! Good job
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This is great! Sometimes it is the somplest things that give us the most comfort. Great job and best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Patty
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It's great how you can use something like a school assignment and come out with this. I love this poem and all. I can relate, but I'm not sure it's what I need. I'll see.
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Oops, forgot this.
Total - 36.5/50 or 73% -
-flow ( 7/10 )
-subject ( 6.5/10 )
-fitting title ( 4/5 )
-word choice ( 3/5 )
-originality ( 8/10 )
-spelling and grammar ( 5/5 )
-how much I like it, basically. ( 3/5 )
I think that with more interesting word choice this could have been a lot better. I found it a little bland. -
This is cute
Oh my goodness I dont think I could find a place in mine that I can get and sit down. You must have a nice big closet
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actually, my closet is very small. lol. i has to squish to get in there now. it was easier when i was little
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i can relate to this.. great ending well done and thanks for entering my contest
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I really like this it's like your closet is your protector and friend good job
♥always Kay -
Nice one... personifying the solitude into an object which understands the feeling. I wonder if the closet has a voice recorder or whatever, just in case you need a comforting word.
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Not bad ...
although it won't place here. I've got some really good entries and there are only 3 trophies.
Good luck with the other contests.
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Good luck in my contest.
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Loved this.
The whole idea of hiding in the closet when the world's too much is brilliant.
But I'd have to remove this; pre-written poems are not allowed for this option.
ly write though...x
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Nice work. Everyone needs some secret place of their own to run to sometimes and be alone. Thank you for sharing this with us and keep on writing!
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Very nice write communicating the peacefulness and comfort of a quiet place to calm oneself and sort things out.
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Interesting piece on a unique state of mind. Great work bringing it to life. Thanks for the great read.
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Nice take on a closet, I think everybody needs a secret place that they can go to when they need to be away. Great poem, keep up the excellent work.
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Isn't it nice to have a seceret place to hide? Thanks for entering.
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