when daddies get angry
and children get battered
they're emotionally stronger
but their lives get shattered
scared kids go to school
and drop subtle hints
but all they get are smiles
and utter silence
noticeably scared
any contact, they wince
no one pays attention
to the screaming silence
go home, to hell
where they never mattered
lullaby of yells
their souls get shattered
ready to break down
broken from pain and violence
the angry child, the hopeless child
cries in empty silence
time goes by
yet no one will notice
the children of the forgotten
in lonely silence
in the end
they're torn and tattered
never able to forget
they're eternally shattered
Author notes
~violent glass
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Comments
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So sad. Hearbreaking. This poem speaks the truth. I felt the pain and the horrible silence. The rhyme was amazing as was the flow. This poem spoke to me. Thank you for this sad yet fantastic entry!
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Utterly Heartbreaking...
With the tears that burn hot against the cheeks as they stream down,,,this is heartbreaking. So true that anger rises to new heights...how can those turn a blind ear...eye and heart to the abused ?
They are as guilty as the ones commiting the crime of child abuse...it is NEVER OKAY!
Thank you for writing and sharing with me.
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great job with this it just rolled off tongue effortlessly you also took a tough topic and really put so much emotion into.
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i love this! your right. i can realte to it really well. i was only in kindergarden at the time but in school thats the way i was. i wouldnt pick up my head when people spoke to me cuz daddy tolled me not to tell anyone. i thought that not talking to people was the only way not to say anything. now i finally speak but i think i will always be hurt. im glad you wrote that. i commend you!
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Excellent.
The rhyme created an interesting flow.
The pain here was obvious and the true message...
That most people would rather turn a blind eye then get involved.
Shari
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"when daddies get angry
and children get battered
they're emotionally stronger"
I find it hard to believe all children would be emotionally stronger due to abuse.
Some typos here, missing an 'e' in line 4 (shatterd), lonley should be lonely, forgotton should be forgotten.
Consistent rhyming, well-done. -
Hey there, long time no speak, I hope you're doing ok..
I love this, I don't like rhyme as a rule but this was really lovely. The repetition of 'shattered' gave this a real sense of drive. The first and last stanzas were my favourite, like a poetry sandwich. Love you, sweetie, x x x
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