Making medley of colors,
covering Earth with poise
at the end of the Fall,
golden leaves falling slowly and softly
leafless plants and trees welcome snowfalls.
Full many a wintery December have I seen
filled the deep woods with white thick snow
silvery are the freezing lakes around the place
fascinating is the scene of ducks and butterballs
crossing the ice-rimmed shores.
Keeping Mother Nature in immense sadness,
like a frozen paradise
brooks, apple trees, birds
and all stand still -
planting trace of fear in our life, days pass by.
Bidding adieu to ice-covered days,
March soon springs with wide smile
turning grey plants into green -
thus it reminds Shelley’s great words:
“Spring follows winter forever.”
Author notes
5 Colors : Golden, white, silvery, grey and green
2 months : December, March
2 emotions : Sadness, fear
1 gender-based word : Mother
3 plants/animals : Woods, apple trees, ducks
1 favorite word : paradise
- Ms Kiddy
A contest entry
- Good Pre Writes With No Trophies by lindaburns.
2100 points, ended November 11, 2008, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Wanna know what you think
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JUDGE:
… “golden leaves falling… like a frozen paradise brooks, apple trees, birds and all stand still -… March soon springs with wide smile…” All good lines. I actually shivered as I read it. I think you got yourself a winner here.
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Great Entry
Brilliant discriptive poem
Good Luck xxx -
Great imagery , captured the subject brilliantly
Good Luck xxx
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Really well described ,imagry captured by your words perfectly
good luck xxx
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Thanks for your valuable time, Lovesky.
I appreciate it..
Cheers
Kiddy
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I like it
Athogh I couldn't help thinking of me with shovle in hand braced against winter fury. -
An excellent poem. Your depiction of winter is superb with the promise of a spring to come. I enjoyed reading this poem very much.
All the best in the contest...Sue
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*shivers*
Yum winter -
i feel like there's some simple words like 'a' and 'is' that you left out in this. like you didn't want to say it too much.
paradise is a beautiful word.
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I like the switch from the nature base to the personal "planting fear in our life" - yet, even here you have cleverly used the natural idea of "planting". Nicely balanced and thought through. By the way being UK based I had to look up butterball and have extended my knowledge of ducks - Ta muchly.
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Very nice immagery here, I feel cold now!! and that last line is so true and adds so much meaning to the poem. Good luck in the contest.
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The pace of the words set the scene for this poem, measured and considered. The colours used reflect the scenes described, and even your background reinforces them. /frozen paradise/ is a good phrase here.
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I love that,
"leafless plants and trees welcome snowfalls."
They do!
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I just loved this from start to finish. You have penned quite the image of nature well. Loved it! Thanks for sharing. I wish you well in the contest.
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This is a beautifully descriptive poem... there was a place that you needed a space after a comma and before the next word, but apart from that this is well written... and I love ducks
thank you for this entry!
Keep writing
Polly
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Very descriptive and some good images. Good luck!
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Simply, lovely!
Best wishes in the contest.
Write on!
*PEACE*
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Wonderful poem. Brought back many memories for me.
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i especially like the first three lines
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