You are my heart
That never wants to be apart
You are soul
With you I am whole
My heart skips a beat or two
Every time I think of you
I hope you feel the same way too
You are my white knight
That always brings me so much light
Outside as it becomes night
The stars begin to shine so bright
I love you
With every inch of my heart and soul...
Please tell me what you think
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He's a lucky man.
This is romantic. I'm jealous. This has a pretty good rhythm and some nice rhymes. I know you probably don't want to change it because you wrote it for your anniversary but I had a suggestion that might help the rhythm and the rhyme.
My heart skips a beat or two
Every time I think of you
Like I said I don't expect you to change it but I thought I'd throw the idea your way. Just so that you know...I'm still jealous.
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Thank you Brian,
I am glad you enjoyed my piece. It means alot to me. And I am going to change that it sounds better. Thank you you comment is highly appreciated.
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Aw, that was really sweet and romantic. The perfect poem for your anniversary. Did you show it to Jay? This was a really nice poem, glad to see you posting again. Keep those awesome poems of yours coming!
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Yeah I did show it to him. Thanks for commenmting your comments are always highly appreciated.
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