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Feign


 


 

 

collected, unencumbered
we waited once, in vain

 

for the torrent, and the thunder
for the passion, for the flame

 

we watch now, and wonder
we watch with swollen veins

 

how dreadful was the blunder
how convincing was the feign

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Balldinger silver member
    April 23, 2008
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    purple garment...

    back scabbed and burnt beneath the finger nails. scapula'd and clattered in a competent cadence. a portion of extorted promise will not come to serve. a confession of alliance stands to be yanked by the temerity of the red cloth. Well worded and crafted within poetic form. ~ EZB

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  • takenfromgrace
    April 17, 2008

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    Wow, this is really good. It's really deep too. I like this. I love the like "how dreadful was the blunder how convincin was the feign"


  • Angelflower
    April 17, 2008
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    wow.. I don't want to sound cliche when I say this .. but this was deep.. well at least for me it was.. I really liked this, the wording that you used was great..

    "for the torrent, and the thunder
    for the passion, for the flame"

    Loved it.. well done..
    Jetleena :