One 'Shot' of a [[bullet]] your down
One 'Stab' of a [[knife]] your dead
You 'Left' me all alone
[[Alone]] on these [[train]] tracks
You 'Left' your [[body]] lieing there
&&& walked [[off]] down the road
I miss you [[dearly]]
your [[kiss]]
[[presence]]
One 'Bang' of a {{gun}} you collapse
One 'Swing' of a {{knife}} you bleed
You {{left}} me here to face {{everything}} alone
{{Alone}} on the road
You 'Stayed' on the {{ground}}
And 'Flew' up to the {{sky}}
I miss your {{smile}}
Your {{touch}}
{{Words}}
But most of all I {{miss}} you being with {{me}}
I {{love}} you till the end of {{days}}
{{NICK}}
Author notes
I know its not very good
But
Over a year ago my boyfriend was stabbed &&& shot to death...
A contest entry
- picture prompt by risewiththesmoke.
450 points, ended April 23, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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OMG i love it britt
i'm so srry about Nick and he shall live in your heart always.. i love you girl and he loves you too. -
Not a huge fan of all the (((Extra))). But you don't wear it too thin, so it's alright here. It's not bad, and god, I imagine it must sting so true.
Keep on writing and remembering.
-Danneh<3 -
i wasnt sure if i liked it at first but i think the style really adds something to the effect. i wont forget this one. im sorry about your bf... i think i would die if that happened... i admire your strength. thanks for entering. <3
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