I was alone, standing quietly on the golden sands
While the sun was retreating into his aquatic abode
And darkness slowly crept over the deserted lands.
The majestic waters blazed, and their tides roared.
It was then that I sighed and knelt beside the untiring waters
And let my fingers dance on the sand, to reveal her name;
But the tides roared and soared, wiping out that name of her’s.
I sighed and did it again, but the callous tides too did the same.
Bothered and annoyed, I wrote her magical name yet once again,
And yet again, the tides took it away with them, into the sea.
Then did I realize that I was doing this act in complete vain.
I then got up, having understood what the sea was doing it for,
And with a nervous smile adorning my lips, I walked towards her.
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WOW!
this was beautiful! it was a well written poem with stunning imagery! truely awesome!
i love this so much! >.< There are so many amazing lines in here which painted such gorgeous pictures in mind... your metaphors were brilliant! excellent materpiece! keep penning kays...
And my fav line was "let my fingers dance on the sand, to reveal her name" it is so powerful and strong with imagery! perfection's staring at me!
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Good poem. I'm gonna read more of your stuff. You made a lot! I'll leave some comments on them too. You must get lots of comments! You have enough poems. I don't even think I have this many. I didn't really understand the part of how "you walked towards her". I didn't get it. Could you explain it to me?!?! Later Lost Rider!
-Beyond Da` (Awsome) Craziness
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