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Beautiful Excess

Here in the streets of Melbourne,
Or any other city – there are clouds and children
And tortured ghosts.
I imagine the massacres that prepared the ground
To grow the cities of my strange land –
I imagine red rocks trembling under the fingers of the sun,
I imagine the terrible quantities of the dead in the ground
And the beautiful excess of life springing forth,
And chaos letting order play,
And storms allowing houses rest,
And trains tearing the air in two,
And love guiding us to our deaths.

Here in the streets of Melbourne
I imagine infinity,
And grin

Author notes

This is the first poem I've gotten around to writing since I moved down - life has been a strange dream.

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  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    November 6, 2008
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    Superb

    Aye, tis a fine write, my friend. You always express your thoughts quite clearly. Thanks for sharing this one with us.


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    this is an intresting and unique piece with potent and creativee images that really grasp the readers attention


  • Valley Girl silver member
    April 16, 2008

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    Interesting write. Very creative, the ending has a unsuspecting and creepy twist as well. Thank you for sharing this with us.


  • motel silver member
    April 15, 2008

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    the images are very potent ... showing the play of creation and destruction. all arises and ceases, then begins again.


  • geron
    April 15, 2008

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    first of all it is great, and the words you choose to describe andhe the way you did it are fantastic


  • kristina85
    April 13, 2008

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    Great poem, like the use of discriptive words you used at the end "And trains tearing the air in two".
    Great pen


  • quantumsurveyor
    April 13, 2008

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    Rather a deathly grin for me. The whole really has little hope in it for Melbourne - glad I am not emigrating LOL Sorry just doesn't hit my spot.


  • Perception
    April 12, 2008

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    Very interesting... i really love your descriptions... they are wonderful

    Great job on this one... hehe... And keep penning


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 12, 2008

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    That was cool!!

    And from someone downunder! Haven't been to Melbourne yet but love to.
    Excellent write.


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    April 12, 2008

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    Well, it's a great come back. I loved it. It had a dreary, time consuming air about it. Awesome.
    Write on,
    ~*~

  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    April 11, 2008

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    Excellent

    This is a poem that has universal appeal. Great imagery.
    I like it just the way it is. Hope all is going well with you, my friend.

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