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Bleeding ( Gold )

Tumbling leaves,

Carpet woodland's floor,

Swirling among bracken,

To the wind of Autumn's fall.

 

Secrets in whispers,

Hushed cries,

Once listened to,

Now simply ignored.

 

Vein pumped through vessels,

Bleed,

Carriageway of destiny,

Paves within roots.

 

Lost in dark corners,

Faded of light,

A torch burned so brightly,

Now, extinguished of life.

 

Love once its canvas,

Heart skipping beat,

Brushed under litter,

Of Winters deplete..........................................

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

20 20 Picture Prompt
Heart in art

-Personal poems w/ lots of emotion for this contest

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • daviscth silver member
    September 9
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    Such beautiful imagery in your words. Thanks so much for posting...

  • perfectsunset
    September 8

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    Wow; this was so full of vibrant Fall imagery
    and beautiful elaborations.

    Just amazing.

    Thanks for entering & best of luck

  • Unconscious-Energy gold member
    April 18
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    Should be Published....

    Free flowing with meaning. I really easy read and impact.

    I will be back...he he.


  • unsigned gold member
    April 12

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    Well thins time I left the names in on purpose but even if I didn't I can see brilliance...I truly loved this it moved so well from start to end and Shamma is right it work better without the Pic.

    Well written my animal loving friend...

    Simon
  • mountain-woman
    April 11

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    Nicely done. It made me feel a little sad. I like the way you took this prompt. All the best in the contest Michele


  • Abe 1
    April 11

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    wowza lady luck u sure ave done justice
    luv it all
    really ope u do well in de contest
    abe


  • imahealer gold member
    April 11

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    Title is perfect for the words that follow. Your metaphors couldn't be better. For free verse, this poem is designed to get the utmost impact. Your last stanza, a sad, but poignant memory, filled with imagery. One of the best out of the box writes I've read in a while. Glad this time you DID NOT upload image! The only thing I would edit is the one line that you did not cap. All the other lines are capped. I am so impressed by your ability to see a photo, and write our your emotions. Well done!

    Shana


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    April 11

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    Very Different style from your other writes --Great meter--Julie--I admire your versatality--Well Done and best of luck in the contest!


  • GreenHrtPaleMoon gold member
    April 11

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    "Now extinguished of life" Brilliant. The metaphors in this piece are stunning to behold. Your last stanza's rhyme was also nice. Like a couplet. *laughs* I can only say WOW, to this piece. One of your best in my opinion. This was an incredible piece Auntie. All the best in this contest.


  • aboomer silver member
    April 11
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    Great images and wording in this!
    best wishes in your contest


  • daviscth silver member
    April 11

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    You have such a beautiful talent for giving your poems life!!! I really liked this sis. Hope you place in the contest!


  • MotorcycleFreak silver member
    April 11

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    Beautiful

    I must say the imagery in this one is outstanding poetess. Another wonderfully penned work. ~Good Luck~Gar


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 11

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    Wow that's awesome hun!!!

    The imagery in this is just fantastic! This is definitely one of my favourites of yours!


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    April 11

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    Stunning writing here. Very very strong in imagery too. Wonderful flow to this. The rhyme in this is very very good indeed. You have done well with this one Julie. Well done.

    Fantastic writing.

    Love
    Wayne Leon
    x


  • poppa silver member
    April 11

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    Wonderful sad poem of love lost ....good luck in the contest..

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