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"Another Love Song"


Who are you,
singing me another love song;
when you know the world's gone wrong.
But you've closed your mind
and thrown away the keys.

Well here am I,
a witness to a world of love songs;
but I know the world's gone wrong.
I've got to bite my lips
and turn the other cheek.

Who are you,
singing me another love song;
pretending that we're getting on, on.
But in the corner of your mind
you are slowly being eaten away.

Well here am I,
a witness to a world that's gone wrong;
listening to your brand new love song.
Now I'm shutting my eyes,
and searching along the keys.

Who are you,
just a witness to a world that's gone wrong;
singing me the same old love songs.
But in the chapel of your mind
you have really fallen down on your knees.

Well here am I,
a witness to a world of love songs;
a witness to a world that's gone wrong.
When I shut my eyes
I slowly started to see.

You and me,
are lost in these beautiful love songs;
lost in this beautiful world that's gone wrong.
But it's not our eyes,
that are really failing to see.

 

You and me,

have all the power to make the world strong;

just singing another love song.

Now I shut my eyes

and I really do believe. 

 

Now I shut my eyes

that's when I really see... 

 

 

 

 

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  • upperworld06
    March 17
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    love this part- You and me,
    are lost in these beautiful love songs;
    lost in this beautiful world that's gone wrong.
    But it's not our eyes,
    that are really failing to see.



    You and me,

    have all the power to make the world strong;

    just singing another love song.

    Now I shut my eyes

    and I really do believe.

    great job and thanks for entering


  • dustytiger
    March 5

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    this is really good, i like that it has a slight duplicity in it's meaning, soothing like a love song, but really about how harsh reality can be, wow, amazing, best of luck in the contest


  • MusicMattnessLives
    May 9, 2008

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    Wow. this is how i feel a lot. they sing love songs while we suffer! its wrong. sorry this isn't a longer comment, but i really can't think today. thanks for entering. best of luck and good write.

    ~MRH~


  • Blissfullhatred silver member
    May 5, 2008
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    its ok...


  • Redrusty66
    April 22, 2008

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    Great rhyme scheme, nice construction and flow. Interesting use of vocabulary and artistic method.Thanks for the great read.


  • rhyana
    April 11, 2008

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    the repetition in this is hypnotic, is good as typed but i think it could be great with the right music behind it.

    two minor points -

    listening to your brand knew <----new? love song.
    and in the first two stanza's shouldn't worlds = world's?

    those two closing lines end it perfectly, poignantly. i can almost hear it fade out.


    • Timespell
      April 12, 2008
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      Thanks for reading and for pointing out my couple of mistakes! Glad you liked these lyrics of mine.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~

      • rhyana
        April 12, 2008
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        no problem. i appreciate others doing the same for me. sometimes i get so caught up in writing that i miss the obvious. good luck!


  • Laura-
    April 11, 2008

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    I like this, it's simple and puts the point across with an air of passion but still leaves the reader desiring to know more. Good luck in the contest!

    • Timespell
      April 11, 2008
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      Thanks, Glad you liked these lyrics. I think I could of carried on writing this song and never stopped!

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • Georgia La Mariposa
    April 11, 2008

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    Wow I liked this a lot it was passionate and poignant, good luck with it in the contest and great work

    • Timespell
      April 11, 2008
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      Thanks... Surprising what my little mind thinks about sometimes. Then next thing I know, it's written down for all to SEE...

      Thanks for reading my lyrics and commenting.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~

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