Walk with me in a slow stride,
enjoy this moment with me.
Frit on tomorrows yield,
will only bring harmful problems for today.
Can you let go of all your past expectations
of what should and shouldn't be?
Born anew through a simple action,
come walk with me.
Lets see what can happen.
Kinder to others hearts,
there's a willingness to open up,
seems to flow natural.
Clean and unrehearsed a special moment,
never to repeat its self.
Audrey Evans
4/10/2008
A contest entry
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Comments
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great use of words and expression of emotion,
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enjoyed this write..lovely flow..thanks for sharing and good luck!
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Thank you for your comment and support. I hope to see more contests from you in the future.
Audrey
aka Rubyvaroom
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wonderful write i liked it alot. its very well written. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
..<3..
Shelly -
Wonderful
so sweet and so true how memories can ruin the moments we create now
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Great!
Good luck in my contest!
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What is so evident in this piece is the desire and in fact burning need of the lover who is conveying to their beloved that NOW is the time. There is no need to think upon what might be or dwell upon what was, as now, here is the time to be consumed. You have injected such momentous desire inside this person to be romanced in the here and now it is staggering. A fusion of passionate love that cannot wait another moment or a fraction of a second and its consummation will be utterly life changing. Wonderful poem.
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Re:With Me.
Thank you for your support and indepth comment. When I wrote "With Me." it wasn't a poem, "With Me." actually was a part of a letter I wrote sometime ago. It's strange how things come about. Once again I thank you for your wonderful review.
Audrey Evan
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romance
Great poem, have you been writing long?
i like how its personal at the beginning and then lets the reader in at the end,
thats the kind of writing i like,
G.B.T.M -
Domz
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