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Dancing firelight flashes and flickers in the night,
as butterflies flutter reflecting the flickering light,
framing a free floating figure frozen fast in fright.
Coals from fires fading from fanning breezes fair,
eyes in the forest feasting on fantasies in the air,
butterflies flittering and flying with fixated flare.
The circle continues as forces flex in fading ease,
as fixed eyes in focus fetch flinches finally agrees,
for flying fairies function as fiction fleetingly flees.
Poem for prompt above
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I forgot that rules stipulated 40 words maximum so poem below
was rewritten for the competition which is my entry now. (39 words)
Dancing firelight flickers in the night,
as butterflies flutter reflecting the light,
around a floating figure frozen in fright.
Coals fading without fanning breezes fair,
eyes feasting on fantasies flying in the air,
Nine butterflies floating with infinite care.
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A contest entry
- Another Overnight Quickie (PIF) - Pic Prompt by kiwigirljacks.
850 points, ended April 12, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Oh yes.. I much prefer this version... so stunning!
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Wow.. how did you find all those F words!! lol
Very well written and holds a lot of depth (unfortunately over the 40 word limit tho)
Thank you for the entry!
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Rewrite submitted a few f***n minutes ago ... PPPPhhhewwww !!!
lol
Bazza
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F***n around......
Just experimenting and playing with words mate. Actually I was inspired by a tongue twister that was brilliantly written by legend which is well worth reading. F***n around I suppose..lol. Thanks for the comment and applause. Gets so boring and hot here that these things can happen..
Barry -
Great alliteration! Good work mate.
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My friend Bazza
As always you weave an interesting, thought provoking write. As the words went by I saw a tale of different natures as my mind wanted to go in separate directions. This one could & probably will be interpreted differently by each reader. Leaving it to the reader as to wich direction to take it.
Good write my friend. Thanx for the read.
~Ron~
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I detect a subtle F theme here, Baz, but I might be wrong.
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Wow! This is fantastic! I had to read it several times because I read poetry outloud. Like a tongue twister all the "F's" caused spittle on my chin. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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