She was my life
It's all I need to say
But I ruined her for all eternity
Just by meeting her that day
Her blush was like no other
It made her my one most desire
And she is why I'm here
To end my life forever
I am burdened by the thought of her
She who ended her life for me
Why did I have to put her through
So much misery?
I cannot live without her
She who held me dear
Who only wanted to be with me
Without the least of fear
I left her for his own good
Hoping to hide this beast I am
As she was crying there I stood
Faking all I am
And now she is gone
Forever it will be
But I'll be with her soon
And very soon she'll see
Everything about her
made me hate everything I am
Then not too soon I realized
The lion fell in love with the lamb.
Author notes
This is something I wrote when I finished New Moon. I thought this might be how Edward felt when he thougth that she had died.
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i think this does fit edwards p.o.v. wonderfully done!
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Great Job Luv
Your getting the rhythm, I feel your flow..... You've painted the perfect picture, the lady lamb and the lion fellow. You're work always gets me right at the end... I love stories
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i loved it! i am a very dedicated team edward member and i started crying during this [[corny but true]]. but really...very well written and emotional.
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Very well written indeed! You have contained great emotion within this piece You have accomplished what every poet strives to do...Leave the reader thinking about and feeling what they have just read. Bravo! Well Done!
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wow sis
that was fantastic...please dont be a better poet then me!!!? lol
well i loved it....it had great emotion and it fit in with Twilight perfectly...i cant wait till the movie comes out..can you?
well keep writing.....you have a great gift..use it wisely.
peace,
UdontunderstandM3
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Oh, that was quite the closer. Quite the closer...
Hmm...It seems like at parts the poem pauses where it should be a continuous flow. And there's a typo: "h'ell".
I like it, especially the last few lines.
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