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immortal lust

I write this down

With pen and paper

to share with you my sin,

A sin I hold down and deep,

Black and cold within,

I write this for I am immortal

And you will surely fall.

For lust is blood

And blood I drink

I will condemn you all.

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  • xXBipolarXx
    April 11, 2008

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    idk but from talkin to you in chat...you dont seem like the type to write things such as this....but good poem anyway...*backs away slowly*


    • HeartofDiamonds
      July 2, 2008
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      Immortal Lust is something I wrote after watching the movie with me dad, "Interveiw with a Vampire" it was a good movie but i couldn't get the first lines of this out of my head...lol I just wrote. =]

  • abyssal
    April 11, 2008

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    Yay for lust...

    There are a few unnecessary commas, I think. I can never be sure because commas are so mystical.

    I like the message behind the poem, upfront about lust, something everyone experiences and deals with.