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Fast Track [HM]

All
aboard
holy souls
stow all baggage-
Our d e s t i n a t i o n
will not be your last stop
enroute to the gates of hell
[although some may say it's true]
It's a fast track on a long black train,
heading for P u r g a t o r y , I l l i n o i s



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Author notes

Option: 3. passengers to purgatory ~ An Etheree ~ 10 Lines of increasing syllables- Starting with one syllable and ending with 10 syllables... { A sleepy Muse, I guess??? }

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  • Amera gold member
    April 14

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    I think the Etheree is a really cool form if it's done well and this is wonderful. I like how you spaced the lettering to improve the structure.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Namita silver member
    April 14

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    Ahhh, I love this... I remembrer writing an etheree once! I'd say this is shape poetry too! A triangle there! Very lovely, any way.

    - namita


  • plainoljoe
    April 11

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    ha ha, made me smile and that's no little feat. Love the innuendo of the inverted triangle

    Joe


  • penman gold member
    April 11
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    Wonderful

    Very well done. Best of luck in the contest