As I lay alone,
Dreaming of you,
I wonder are you,
Dreaming of me too
Please dont hate me.
If I just pretend,
We can last forever,
Love never ends,
Life as we know it
Will stay the same
No one ever cry's
No one plays games
Please dont hate me,
If I just pretend,
Our together forever,
Really has no end,
I took a long walk,
Through life on my own,
I never cared before,
Now I know,
Please dont hate me,
If i just cry,
When i said I wouldnt miss you,
Well it was a lie,
Author notes
Options 1e,3e
A contest entry
- Options contest, with a twist by DeAnges.
450 points, ended April 30, 2008, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Please don't hate me...that line actually thaws the ice a little and takes away the numbing feeling thats supposed to be the apathetic medication to my hearts ache.
Someday I'll never have to hope for forgiveness anymore, because nothing ever lasts forever.
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i love this(l) comment mie x
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awesome job.
umm..im not a good critic so lets just stay w/ awesome
keep up the great workk!
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WOW!!! GREAT
I really liked the first and last stanzas....heck, i loved all the ones in between too. GOOD JOB!!!! -
Great!
You did an awesome job in using the options. This is a very good piece and I love the weight of the only repeated line in this. Please don't hate me. Awesome job!!!
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touching
how true it is.. when you think of someone in the corner of your heart you expect them to think of you too at that moment.. The opening lines were really sweet. beautiful piece of poetry.. keep wrinting
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