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they call her Dirty China






chopsticks
in hair;
found strutting
behind take-out boxes
on Forty-third.



Author notes

10 words is impossible.

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    April 11, 2008

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    This is an interesting poem... it makes me curious as to what she is like, why she is there etc... I like the imagery in the first three words - for being impossible in ten words you did very well!

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • blackday
    April 10, 2008

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    Love the take on this one. The language felt quickie, but the image was pretty strong. Leaves me to wonder about her story.

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    April 10, 2008
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    A vivid image. Nicely done.


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    April 10, 2008
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    Good image.

    Best of luck!


  • Age of Rain
    April 10, 2008
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    I loved the use of strutting. Great image in this piece. Well done!

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