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your porcelain skin
is damned,
sacrificing everyday --
'a sculptured body'.
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A contest entry
- 10-10-13 Quickie Contest [10 words, 10 minutes, 13 entries] by blackday.
700 points, ended April 10, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Ahhh; nice. Clever, yep! Yeah, we people here believe that if teh top lines together make a curve/smile, we get good-looking husbands, lol.
This is lovely
Congrats on the HM!
- namita
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Cleveryly written!
~ Nicolette
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we wrote similarly
or at least i think that you wrote of a whore.
well done.
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Yes, you are correct. Do you read minds...lol
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i do, actually.
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Me, i only know how to read palms
On a serious note that we can laugh at. According to my relatives it runs in the family. In different forms and ways...lol
Ain't we love our Asian region.
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the only ting i ever learned about palm readings was that if the top most line made a u, you'd live happily married or something like that. it was bullshit elementary schools believed in.
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Wow! a very welled penned epic in so few words. I loved the flow and emotion of this writ. Best wishes in the comp
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The last line really closed it up nicely. I liked its subtle tone over the rest of the harsh voice in the beginning.
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The way we see ourselves is often so critical - but beauty comes in all forms.
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Very nice. A harsh critique of a superficial world. So very true.
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A wonderful take. Been too long since I read you.
Best of luck!
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Thanks Mark for the comment. Nice to hear from you again.
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