Encircled by your love flowing, freely
from within your open heart.
Tangled up with emotions rushing, gently
from it came my blissful desire.
Promised vows of never ending, soulfully
from drawing ourselves together.
Created life so vibrant showing, colorfully
from which we both had produced.
Desired needs beyond reproaching, tenderly
from it we gained inner strength.
Frightened now by what's becoming, needlessly
from things out of our control.
Encased is your heart rendering, softly,
from a waterfall into the opaque.
Traveled far from our beginnning, madly
from our once well chosen path.
Waited so many long years crying, inwardly
from the knowledge of no return.
Saddened by the lonliness ripping, cowardly
from life's reality of my broken heart.
Author notes
Picutre Inspired. Enyoyed the prompt.
Option 1 : He loves me not
A contest entry
- Picture inspired by Unsigned.
450 points, ended April 12, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Feelings At Present. by Poetryintheblood.
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Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank you for your most heartfelt and beautifully expressed entry Josie
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wow...ok so I read Shannas comments after the poem and so went back to read it again. I have been through two divorces and many breakups so I know only to well how painful it is...I also love wholeheartedly and without brakes, so when it ends it is normally a car crash...you wrote this with the style and grace of a figure skater, I would have been a battle scene from ww1.....thanks so much for the emotions ans honesty shown here...
Simon
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Beautifully expressed my friend. Just beautiful. All the luck in the contest!!
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Thanks for you comment and I really do appericate your input. This one was something that just flowed out and I feel much better now. Many thanks, Michele
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I truly enjoyed this verse. Your title is Perfect for the penned words beneath. First stanza you take us on the trip of the first part of your marriage, where all was wine and roses. Then you switch in the second stanza, to how you feel after divorce. Your emotions are very clearly shown through wonderful imagery. I think you have one typo in the second stanza, first line. "Frightened now by what becoming". Other than that the format you chose to expose your heart is creative. Best wishes.
Shana
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