A spring wind blows
your breath on mine
Your halo glows
my life devine
Flowers bloom
my love for you
A star lit room
I fell into
Endless dreams
of you and I
Desire streams
in passions eye
Golden fields
wind swept hair
My heart yields
that I might share
Eternity
one more night
In my arms
will take flight
Author notes
Wrote this less then an hour ago.
A contest entry
- ONE DECENT CONTEST FOR YOU.... by phoenixonfire.
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Comments
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A great entry
thanks for taking part, wishing you luck would be an insult to your talent
so take care
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Billy (Rhythm Child) -
Even though this is simple the way you broke the lines up makes us read it slower taking in the thought. I loved the words, desire streams and starlit room. Ty for your entry
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This is really simple...though its beautiful in its thoughts but as poetry it definitely needs a lot of work ur rhyming is good but the way ur thoughts flow..they are very clumsy. try creating paragraphs/verses. Two lines are distracting. Needs lot of work. If u need help let me know!!
Otherwise nice thoughtline.
Thanks for entering and good luck!!
pri
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beautiful, as always.
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