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Warpyre

Fighting till everything around us dies:
Unsightly remains a testament to
Cocksuckers of War--
Kissing it's balls!

Your achievements garner
Ovations in Hell:
Underworld demons licking lips of fire.

Assume you conquer and destroy
Supposed enemies of your twisted ideals--
Shit for brains!--
Holy justice will find you out in this
Or another world where
Law and Truth prevail!
Evil will only triumph over Good for a
Season.

Author notes

I want them all to just go away...can't they just be exterminated? Is the human condition so foul that it can never be purged?

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  • Mad Pastor Grovell
    June 7, 2008

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    Not very good. Pray to Jesus that he may explain how to use an apostrophe and what it means in grammar. Pray hard.


    • twaintwine
      June 10, 2008
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      You are Ignorant

      There are no apostrophes needed in this poem. Whichever god you serve has apparently never taught YOU grammar. Try slicing your flesh and screaming to the heavens, "Strunk and White, Strunk and White..."!


  • Mr Violet
    June 7, 2008
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    Um the first thing I thought of to say is that I think there are too many exclamation points. But then I thought, 'hey they actually fit.' So nice job on that. I like how the last line is kind of formal, and contrasts the whole shit brain, ball kissing that's going on in the main body of the piece. Line 8 has a cool sound. Love the title.


    • twaintwine
      June 10, 2008
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      Thnak you for your insight and drawing my attention to the exclamation marks. I'll look at it and see if it is overkill. Thanks for being positive! Aloha, friend.

  • luvdrkchocolate
    June 6, 2008
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    Oh. This is a sad poem that you have constructed in here. It really sounds tortured and frustrated. Almost like you feel like throwing in the towel or something like that. I guess the contest that you entered called for that kind of passion so I guess you were just getting it out. I thought you did a good job of expressing yourself here.


    • twaintwine
      June 7, 2008
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      I don't enjoy celebrating war, death and destruction unless it is in a tortured manner. I guess that makes me un-patriotic.


  • Barry Hodges
    June 6, 2008

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    Jesus will kill the swine who invaded Iraq and he will give them very bad haemorrhoids. Lovely poem. Not.

    • twaintwine
      June 7, 2008
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      War Pigs?

      Day of judgement, God is calling...on their knees the War Pigs crawling...


  • twaintwine
    April 10, 2008
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    When You Wish Upon a Star

    Meditate on the American Flag...50 wishes can be made...you are such an idiot! But your music is pretty good at www.nakedadam.net if I do say so myself.

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