There is a house in the village past my parents house but not quite near the dump where the other bodies were found. halfway between the 2 places.At this house lives several people.a lady and her young daughter who is probably maybe 13.Two older brothers who i will call Ken and Ben.Then we have two other brothers who wits are a bit a miss. they are Jimmy and Johnny the girl we will call Sue.Ken is the brother who is causing trouble. what trouble might you ask. ken is screwing the girl who is 13.and Ben is getting pretty peeved. he has warned his brother many times and he he's had enough. so on this day ken is in the room with the girl and Ben has had it. so with gun in hand he goes in and shoots his brother. one of the bullets hits the girl in the arm or chest i'm not sure which.My sister tells the story to me as i am living in town at the time.With his brother dead he tells Jimmy and Johnny to bury the body. well where do you think this body will end up. he wants them to dig a hole in the dirt floor of the garage.Ken takes the girl off to the hospital and owns up to what he did.The police arrive in the village and have helicopters in fields and the press is there. my sister warns them to watch out for snakes and other strange animals in the house for it is known for them to have such things. needless to say they find dead things.and they find the 2 brothers digging a hole for the dead body.Ben was sent to prison for 20 years the 2 brothers went to court and were accessed for their mental state but they only did what they were told to do. Ben has never been in trouble before he had a real good job for years. he did his time and is now out and is trying to help wayward teens. folks figured he'd move back but he moved on someplace else.The girl is in her 20's and due to have a child soon, but she has been a wild sort all these years. the 2 young guys are still doing their thing and staying out of trouble.if you want to know something they would probably know.Things like this happening in a small village.
are known in big cities and small cities.
What will happen next?
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Author notes
this is a true story.
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Comments
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This story would have been more effective had you watched your punctuation and grammar. You also need to "liven" things up a bit, tease the reader into wanting to read the next line - "What's going to happen next???" Keep on writing. Practice makes perfect. WW
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hey, it's a good story but I don't think it was well told. I didn't feel anything when I read about Ben killing his brother. I don't think you really captured the emotion of it. But that's just me. The theme is a good one and you're right, it could happen anywhere.
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Chilling true story here. It just goes to show you that evil does not just exist within the 'Big Cities' but in towns, villages and wherever you find people. I thought your imagery in this was good too. And you explained this murder well. Keep writing.
Love
Wayne Leon

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