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The Angel

You thought she was an angel
When the sun shone through her hair,
And you may have thought the other
Really didn't care;
Cause she felt just like a shadow,
Though that love never died.
Sister do you see the light?
After all, she tried.

Looking through the eyes
Of a flawless porcelain doll,
You'd think that she'd be happier
Looking down upon them all.
He always called her beautiful
But only pictures she would see.
If only she still had her wings,
That wouldn't have to be.

And when the time had come to cry
And they couldn't force a smile,
The angel he would pick them up
If only for a while.
Maybe in another world
She would surly see
What it's like when earthbound angels
Are able to be free.

He said what made her beautiful
Was merely not her looks,
But she knew that she could never quite
Escape society's hooks.
But after all the hurting and the happiness deprived,
Sister dry those crying eyes;
For you my love survived.

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  • breannawilliams
    October 3

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    This is an amazing poem! My favourite stanza is the very first because I love the part, "You thought she was an angel/When the sun shone through her hair." Amazing. Wonderful job!


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 11

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    Very nice emotional write. Thank you for entering.

    ♥
    whisper


  • Salty Hibiscus gold member
    January 31

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    beautifully written. your choice of words are superb. thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    November 12, 2008
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    Thank you for your entry very nice write.
    But I see you already have an HM,
    ED.

  • poets whisper silver member
    November 11, 2008
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    nice rhyme and it flows which helps the story along. Really nice job thank you for enering


  • vampireblood
    November 11, 2008

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    Wow,
    I really liked this. It flowed and rhymed very nicely.
    I will definately keep this in mind when I pick winners.
    Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.

    Vampy


  • Moonlightdragon gold member
    October 28, 2008
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    bravo well penned !


  • lindaburns gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    I would like for you to put in some punctuation and make those last two lines grammatically correct so I won’t have to delete your poem for not following the rules. Or you can remove it and submit another. Or just remove it. I hope you don’t just remove it.


  • background music
    April 11, 2008

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    Very good! Nice flow rythm and rhyme through out. I enjoyed this poem. We are all in a way just angels looking for our wings... Thanks for entering my contest.

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