Thrush--
Regarding
Winter's survival
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A thrush's larder
Consists of beetles, worms, ants--
Even ash berries.
Author notes
Graphic by: enquiries@wildlife-art-paintings.co.uk
Version #1 attempts Japanese phrasing.
Version #2 is 5-7-5 in English.
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XXVII by Arkbear.
450 points, ended April 17, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Hi Chantel :)
Perfect count and lovely idea of menu delight :)
I'm glad you went further than just telling me the bird was eating, and brought a new take on this prompt...and thank you for sharing the Japanese version with us...........good job and God bless,
Bear ~
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These are poetic forms
that I am beginning to study. I can't effectively critique your poems. I love this form. I hope to someday write in it. I appreciate someone who already is using Haiku and Tanka. I hope you do well in this contest. And may you progress in your voice. Well done, poetess
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Nice
I like the first one. Much more powerful imagery. The second one doesn't quite fit the picture. The 5-7-5 pattern is often hard ot use.
Keep up the writing! -
I love haiku style esp. the first one real strong. Keep them coming
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Excellent!
A well done piece here. Cool trying forms new.
Thanks for sharing you. Peace~
-Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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Nicely done!
Best wishes in the contest!
Write on.
*PEACE*
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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