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An Unfortunate Cinema Outing

Hoodwinked by summer blockbuster sour
Paid six-fifty to view pure chowder
Made even staler by youthful chatter

An ill-contrived villain's disguise was missing parts
In ridiculous copy of harebrained tangent scenes
Reminiscent of government cheese minus the benefits

Unseated adolescents murmured loudly of sequel
Though how they weighed worth I shall not dismember
As faces existed in cellulars and other gadgets rather  

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1. Midnight in the Summer of my Screams

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  • penman gold member
    April 11, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • jcat gold member
    April 11, 2008

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    Hahahahahaaaa......Yep I see we were at the same movie once upon a time??? Well done and thanks for the lovely chuckle this morning!!!


  • Tattboyspet
    April 11, 2008

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    "Made even staler by youthful chatter" - and that is why I HATE going to movies at night over the weekend ~shaking head~
    HAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHA - You have this EXACTLY the way I see it!!! I thought it was only here in South Africa that the kids were like that, but it seems it's like that all over the place ... EXCELLENTLY done Mark
    congrats on the greenie


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 10, 2008

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    Awesomeness!!

    Sounds like many a bad cimena experience I've had!


  • Solo Wisp gold member
    April 10, 2008
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    heh!


  • blackday
    April 10, 2008

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    lmfao. I guess I'm guilty of being such a person, looking at my cell phone during movies. xD oopsie.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    April 10, 2008

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    YEt again you amaze me my dear. wonderfully penned.
    best wishes to you in the contest.

    PAssions


  • Randomly Beautiful
    April 10, 2008

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    Government cheese...was way good back in the day. Nice take on the prompt.


    • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
      April 10, 2008
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      Someone told me they still had it in some states and it even came in swiss now. lol

      Thanks for reading.

      • PassionsPromise gold member
        April 10, 2008
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        Swiss tooo??? holy cow what state????

        • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
          April 10, 2008
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          Not sure.. perhaps Wisconsin? lol


          • jcat gold member
            April 11, 2008
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            Hey!!!! I resemble that remark!!!! We don't have no goverment cheese anymore!!! Just 'cuz we the dairy state don't mean we give it out for free

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