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Reveille

mountain comes to life
melodically awoken
springtime revelry

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Arkbear gold member
    April 17, 2008

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    Hi Julie :)

    I love the images.....your Flow is a little awkward to the tongue.....for me....and  melodically is 5 sylables..>>

     

    me/ lod/ i/ cal/ ly  :)

    http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/melodically

     

    Other than that....very nice entry......thank you for taking the time to enter Julie :)

     

    Bear ~


    • islekine gold member
      April 21, 2008

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      Mahalo Bear!

      I appreciate all of your help. Please forgive me for not making sure. I have now gotten into the habit of looking it up. Just entered one of Julie's contests...and had two word counts wrong! I'm learning!
      thanks again.
      See ya soon
      *PEACE*
      J


  • Samplette gold member
    April 11, 2008

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    This is really good. The only problem I see it the first word being capitalized. I think if you fix that you will have a nice haiku for the the contest.
    Sam


  • luckynsincere
    April 11, 2008

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    Nicely done. Wording is quite superb
    Thanks for the comment on my contest piece as well. I wish you the very best of luck

    Mel


  • Kelli Marie
    April 10, 2008

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    A great write islekine. You did a very well with your haiku and use of metaphor. Good luck in the contest.
    Kelli

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