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Life A Tapestry

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Life -

A tapestry,
held together by stitches

placed with perfection

and piercing  precision...

 

the very fabric of existence
woven together…

 

Tears and pain repaired,

a pastiche of patchwork
in subtle shades of strength
to create a work of art

 

A needle pulling life -
like threads of time
through space.

 

 

 

 

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  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    August 5, 2008

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    It takes all of this to make our lives something beautiful and wondrous. Love the use of the tapestry metaphor here.


  • Crowheart
    August 1, 2008

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    a single word idle, threadbare
    once pulled
    through itself and others
    together
    they writhe in the closets
    of fashionable scripts


  • moonbumps silver member
    April 11, 2008

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    A subject you know so well-
    Comes through so well
    Good luck with this Babes!
    LOve Hilly xxx


  • Mirthryl
    April 11, 2008

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    Outstanding photo to illuminate your write! Very nice tapestry metaphor. Truly lovely "tears and pain repaired...in subtle shades of strength." Alliteration a little beyond my saturation point in the first stanza (I enjoyed "piercing precision" the most!)


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    April 11, 2008

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    Its great Ms Sue. I'm not much of a fan from freeverse but I do recognize a good poem when I see it. As with all of your work this one is great.

  • Bad Bill
    April 11, 2008

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    Excellent free verse, thoughtful and well-structured. The concluding lines, as arafura has said, are wonderful.

    Bill


  • arafura gold member
    April 10, 2008

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    I love the last three lines!

    "A needle pulling life -
    like threads of time
    through space."

    Excellent. Good luck in the contest!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    April 10, 2008
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    I rather like it
    I like the idea of life needing repair.


  • Dalaney gold member
    April 10, 2008
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    beautiful free verse, my friend.
    I think this is perfect. Love, Lane

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