I’m just a wave as in many an ocean of a tide in many a sea
I cannot get rid of the notion how they’d manage without little me
My glistening froth helps form a trough carries flotsam
Back onto the shore and in the heat I cool the feet
Of the kids in case they get sore
I Fill up the moats of sand castles
And make little pools for the crabs
And if you think that’s a bit of a hassle
You should see what I do for the dabs
Although I’m not strong I carry along
The cockle shells onto the beach
I even help to bring in the kelp
And put it in everyones reach
And if one day you paddle in the sea
Spare a thought and give a little wave to me
Author notes
JUDMC Option no. 5 (Ocean)
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beautiful work
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pineapple-eyes
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "The Little Wave" glad you like it........Best Wishes.....George.......
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Sweet little poem but marginally centred upon the twin subjects of option three.
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Hello :)
Good personification of a wave, though I don't see the other aspect of the option you chose which was smells. This is obviously the sea. I think you were supposed to compare, contrast or incorporate them in some way. At any rate I get a sense of cuteness about this poem. I don't know that cuteness is actually a quality in a poem but there you go lol.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy -
Well Done!
Congratulations on the well-deserved Bronze Award!
Well Done!!
I admire the inner-rhyme in theopening stanzas.
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nice imagery with a childlike quality --appropriate.
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This is such a pretty little poem. I can imagine this in a poetry book for children. Not just because of it's cuteness, but it's message too. There are lots of waves out there, just like there are lot's of kids, but each one is necessary and unique. And it makes me think of going to the beach when i was a little one.
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I love the internal rhyme in this poem. This is an interesting poem that really makes me appreciate those little waves a lot more. Thank you for this refreshing peice and good luck in my contest.
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