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Dear Eli,

Inanimate stares

Thoughts unbearable while
Hearing your voice and trying to
Ingest your words.
Never wanted you more but
Keeping it secret for a little while longer.

I hunger for nothing
More then being yours.

I have felt this for a while
Now but I have hidden it well.

Leaving for the
Ocean, traveling the
Vast open seas, wasn't
Enough to make me forget your beauty.

Well if
I can't have you
Then why bear this
Horror, "I'm going to kill myself tomorrow."

My failed
Attempt to end this
Relentless
Grief brought
Out the
Truth, I love you...

Author notes

While I have never done an acrostic, it my style just done a little different, haha.

Theme: Its a line from the movie The Royal Tenenbaums. Richie Tenenbaum is writing a letter to his friend Eli Cash about how lonely he is and how he is in love with his step sister. The line "I think I'm in love with Margot" is the end of the letter and I thought it would be fun to try and use it in this poem but ended up using it as the theme for it, haha.

Side note: I also tried to make Richies feeling for Margot alive in the poem while also trying to make it relate to a situation that is happening with me right now so it has a lot of meaning behind it.

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  • Midgetbridgey
    April 13, 2008
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    very very good

    goodluck


  • nikkia
    April 10, 2008

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    this has a lot of strong emotion in it and it really evokes the feelings of love. good job and thanks for the entry