In the quiet moments of dawn,
I am alone
with your lies
The eyes
that once caressed me tenderly
now flash in angered
defiance to hide the truth
The trust has evaporated
like so much dirty snow
caked against the sidewalk
Even when you are here,
I am lonely
for your heart no longer beats for me only
and your hands
have danced over another's skin
in both friendship and intimacy
When you said forever,
you must have meant
until now.
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Bean Sidhe
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A contest entry
- Can this be happening? by ciara12.
1350 points, ended March 9, 2009, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - liars by gasper.
311 points, ended September 13, 2009, 20 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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Bam!!! Love it, don't have to say more, this speaks for itself! Well done, and best in the contest! faith
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Brilliance
This is brilliance at its highest form.Of the twenty entries submitted so far,this is my stand out favourite. The wording,tone,layout,back ground,every part of this works so wonderfully well. This was a true pleasure to read,a true inviting piece of poetic bliss. Well done on you,for being anle to wrote so powerfully and so uniquely. 10/10,no I must correct my self 100/10,thats how fantastic this is. -
I loved this write so much and I see that it relates to my life so much and I love how it flowed
Love forever and always
Ciara ann -
I really enjoyed this penning... It flowed really well, and I loved the imagery that you have going here. I really enjoyed reading this. I don't usualy say all great things about a write. But I can't really find anything to pick at!! well done poet!!
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I must agree with the lady. The last line was absolutely amazing. I envy your gift for words. Never stop.
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the last line is absolute killer! very clever
good write 
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