Soft moons & fair meadows viewed
in cascaded dreams of night
hold at bay isolation
previously spirit felt
As from soul feelings protrude
so impossible to fight
seeking her coronation
as beauty in which to melt
Removed from the span of time
to dwell within the sublime
Author notes
Ashley Rhyme:
Is a new poetic form created by Mark A. Griffin. It consists of two quatrains followed by a couplet. Each line is seven syllables. The rhyming scheme is abcd abcd ee. By Line 3 of the second stanza the poem should become more personal.(As in use of a personal pronoun)
A contest entry
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800 points, ended July 2, 2008, 32 entries
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Comments
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Wow; this was brilliant. Loved your metaphor and imagery. Stunning write!
Thanks for entering and best of luck
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Splendidful 
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HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHA ... how the HELL are we going to live with her now???!!!
what have you done Mark?!?!?!
beautiful words here my friend
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I still havent gotten into the forms..I might try this one when I have some time...You are amazing..
Noreen
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Amazing! I love the form that you have created!
I would love to try it sometime. I have been too far behind on reading my favorites lately
I promise to be better
This is awesome
Lynda
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Gorgeous!!! Love the form you've created and the write is so precious!!
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Well done here bro. I loved it. This is a precious form in which I shall try out soon enough. Best wishes and CONGRATS for getting in on the Form Game..We have us a WINNNNERRRRRRRRRRRRR
Love ya
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wow!!
wow!! this is great!!! its a short peice but it is very very good!!! I LOVED IT MARKGRIF!!! VERY GOOOD!!!!
WOW!! you must have spent alot of time on this!!! its just amazing!! your poems r very good! you have many! but I love them!!
anyways, GREAT GREAT WORK AND A JOB WELL DONE!!!!
much love!!
xxhoopstar21xx
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Well thank you for reading.
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Beautiful vocabulary. I like the scheme, it's interesting. The poem evokes beautiful imagery and feelings within the reader, or at least me. Great job
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be careful of schemes
should the word take a great deal of time to coalesce into rhyme at will or to run at will, I feel as if the subject, besides beauty, is still. What is the thing you beautify, and why? there is space for a verse this form avoids and a void to be filled. -
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It is only partial to complete. Words not being summation but token not to be brandished on account of other lacking. It is extra which surrounds verbiage verily which I believe holds above even the mightiest of sonnets.. or the formed creations of a humble novice.
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