The feel of her skin, soft like velvet
As I run my hands down her beautifully crafted body
Her soft breathing as I stroke her
The soft intake of breath as I proceed further down
And touch a place, a place that all women have
The feel of our lips interlocking
The steady rythym of her heart against mine
The lush and ripe feeling of tender breast
And the quickening of her breath as I enter her
The breathing lapses into sighs of pleasure
As I gently rock her to and fro
Then, the sudden release of my seed
And her hands tightening on my back as she too releases
We lay there, softly breathing, and then the sounds soon return
Her heart quickens in her breast
Her once calm breathing soon comes in quick bursts
I ride her once more, her soft breasts moving to and fro
The nipples standing hard and high
I feel them with my tongue and mouth
Such a delicious taste as I draw and draw upon it
Her soft sighs soon turn to pantng as I quicken my pace
She calls my name and grasps my back
She draws forth blood, but I do not care
Once more we release, and then collapse
And sleep like that, with me on top of her warm body
As the sounds of the night fill our ears
We drift away into peace.
A contest entry
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This made me kind of akward when I wrote it, how does it make you feel?
Comments
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Something I noticed was that you had a tendency to keep using certain words, like soft, breath, breast...
It kind of creates a disruption in the flow, which is a bit unappealing, especially in a sensual poem.
Good description, though. -
Wow...
I'd love to wactch....
She must be terrific!
Wish I could taste her too!
You described her well!
Thank you for sharing her with me!
Galaxy2 -
wow! it sooths me.
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What a sensual piece of poetry. It is very...vivid haha your imagery is amazing though. The only thing is that there isn't much, if any, dirty-pretty in this piece. If there were, they weren't noticeable to the human eye. But this is a very good poem
Thanks for entering & I wish you the best of luck ! ♥
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Wonderful encounter...
I'd like to join
'The feel of her skin'
sensational
'soft like velvet'
I'd love to touch it
'I run my hands down her beautifully crafted body'
My hands join the activity
'Her soft breathing as I stroke her'
I get closer to her face to listen to her lyrical breath
'I proceed further down'
so do I
'The feel of her lips interlocking'
I've waiting for my turn, sweet girl!
'The steady rhythm od her her heart against mine'
Let me feel it by putting my hand under her pretty breasts
'The lush and ripe feeling of tender breasts'
rubbable breasts!
'and the quickening of her breath as I enter her'
I caress her lips
'The breathing lapses into sighs of pleasure'
I want to add to her level of pleasure
'As I gently rock her to and fro'
my hands and mouth are busy massaging, kissing, caressing
'Then the sudden release of my seed'
I'm wet too
'Her hands tightening on my back as she too releases'
I want to lick her nectar
'We lay there'
I'm on her other side
'softly breathing'
my breath is getting uneven
'I ride her once more'
I'm still waiting for my turn
'her sift breasts moving to and fro'
I start squeezing them
'The nipples standing hard and high'
the proud crests...proud to watch two lovers working on them
'I feel them with my tongue and mouth'
while I explore the lower areas
'Such a delicious taste'
I bet it is
'Her soft sigh soon turns to panting as I quicken my pace'
good for me...
I won't have to wait for long now
'She calls my name and grasps my back'
I bite her buttocks
'She draws forth blood'
vampirish!
'Once more we release'
while I'm still biting her stiff buttocks
'and then collapses'
beauty at her climax!
...Now, move over baby!
My turn.........
Wow...
I enjoined the pleasant company...
thank you sweet lady...
thank you baby...
Galaxy2
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beautifully written with great imagery. this is erotic with a tasteful feel to it. good job on this, loved it hun. makes me want to be in a relationship even more
christina
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this has amazing imagery. nice job
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I do like some of the verbiage here, but it is a bit heavy laden with pronouns and therefore starts to feel like more of a statement rather than poetry... but nonetheless many thanks for entering this contest
well done
G.x -
Wow
this is amazing, i really like it =)
xXx-xXx
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This was most sensious and beautiful. You brought out the beauty of making love. I would go further, if you can, and describe what sounds return. Perhaps "The sounds of her heart softly beating return" I am looking for more here in this beautiful verse.
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