Your fingers are now phantoms
touching my skin-
I grasped but I couldn't hold on...
The scent of you fills every breath
and the lonliness has just begun-
You slid into my crevices
like an understated miracle-
Doused a ring of fire with flesh
as cool as a running stream,
and I listened for your name
between the sounds of sighs
and slapping skin, that echoed off
these motel walls... it must have
disappeared, as smooth as silk-
Leaving only tender spots
around a gaping wound
and nothing for this heart-
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Author notes
Artist Unknown...
A contest entry
- Best Prewrites From April 2008 by amaranthine lover.
525 points, ended June 1, 2008, 28 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Beautiful piece.
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Beautiful, yet sad...
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This piece is worth of many long, savoring pauses, and re-reads.
Is it not striking how physical love reaches in and strokes hearts... electric penetrations and receptions ... yet there is the void of longing, the tensions between choice and reluctance ----.
This is special, and very real Ithica. Because it is true.
It gives me that catching/sinking wind in the chest, making me stop and force breath deeper to try to fill what I know is a bottomless well. because I must.
"Your fingers are now phantoms I grasped but I could [not] hold ... The scent of you ... fills the loneliness ... [in]... my crevices... an understated miracle- ... Doused a ring of fire ... cool ...water... between the sounds of sighs .... echoed off...walls... disappeared,... Leaving a gaping wound ... and nothing for this heart- "
I like this very much.
"Your fingers are now phantoms I grasped but I could [not] hold ...
that especially is the whole piece in a phrase.
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Well-expressed.
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Classy erotica, hot stuff!!!
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awe struck(ow)@.@
so.. so .. very beautiful Gawd
"The scent of you fills every breath
and the lonliness has just begun- "
and the entire piece
and " Leaving only tender spots
around a gaping wound
and nothing for this heart- "
so so graceful
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This is truly beautiful I am astounded at your talent
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everything else...
with a concrete completion of love and touch once made, the listening between the sounds appears to become curiously hollow toward the end. gap standards fill a hole as they often tend to leave one simultaneously. well worded, Ms. Ica.
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nice
nice write on love and sex . . liked "Your fingers are now phantoms" and "The scent of you fills every breath" . . well done
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These feelings here are so painful!!! Very well written as you conveyed the angst so beautifully....
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What a wonderfully erotic write... with such sad overtones... You touch all emotions and you do it so deftly that yhou "Leave only tender spots." Wonderfully done...
Ken
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One of the very classiest erotic poems I have seen done on AP.
hats off to you me lady.
len
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Wow! This is hot! I am very impressed with this. I love good erotic poetry and this is done with class.
Love,
Amera♥
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You sure hav a way with words. This is an excellent write and has wonderal images and metaphors. You are truly talented.
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never loose sight of the good and you'll not miss perhaps what was never there
Joe
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This is gorgeous... those kind of touches, the ones that leave fingerprints, are like ghosts when they are gone.
this is a touching piece. Your wording is superb, and the image goes with this perfectly. Artist unknown? meaning the picture?
WELL PENNED!!
Mel
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Wow
Beautifully penned piece of sensual art in words..
Softly spoken I can hear, and see the thoughts oozing
Julie
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there are several lines within this
poem that I wish I could steal right
about now
Understated miracle...
damn, girl, you are truly amazing.
Love, lane
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