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Interloper

Why do angels pick me up
and drop me down
Am I a movable mass

of emotions,
devotions...

Haloed or hollow
I have arrived at an end,
beginning 
an odyssey

An eery existence
interprets this place
Life leads me by the throat
and when I scream
for release,

I choke on my words...

Disillusioned,
I converge with

other worlds, in an effort to suspend

my suspicions, 
and extend my dimensions

The source of my acuity
is the fluidity

of my muse, who's mired in mishaps,

and missed steps  
while  remarkably
my heart, my soul,

still holds this pen


What if
at the end of my quill,
questions still persist
and the pieces don’t fit
and none of this
mystical mayhem 
can endure or
secure

endearments...    to breathe again

Again,
I succumb to this interchange 

of gold and gray...

"Awake" they prompt

"You have paid the toll"

I come into being,
seeing, sensing, 

brushing sticky indifference

from the corners of my eyes
while sheets of caterpillar cocoons 

...call 

The spirit speaks
while warbling,

wobbling

on the far edge of clarity,

converging with insanity 

and until the day comes,

that forgets to begin...

I'll pick up my pen, in answer!






 

 

 

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A contest entry for: Open Theme- 500th Contest
Write about writing but do it in such a manner that we will not say, "I had read such before". A great deal of literature has been written about writing...can you find the far edge? Free Verse.

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  • hope4revolution
    April 27, 2008

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    this is great! i really enjoyed the read. the strongest stanza is definitely the one that is quoted before my comment, but there are some other really great parts too. thanks for sharing!


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    April 12, 2008

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    Superb

    Aye, you certainly have caught the Spirit of Your Muse.
    A very fine write indeed. I like it just the way it is. Have a good evening.


  • KayJay
    April 12, 2008

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    Well written... I really enjoyed it. Your lines "What if at the end of my quill, questions still persist
    and the pieces don’t fit" hits so close to home (LOL). Are you sure you weren't eavesdropping on my thoughts?
    Congratulations on the recognition!
    Ken


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    April 12, 2008

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    This is a very clever description of a poet. I have admired your work in the past and continue to do so now. The way you assemble words reminds me of the choreography that goes into water ballet. Great job.


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    April 12, 2008

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    Oh what a great description of a writer... it does sometimes feel we must pick up a pen to pay a toll of sorts.
    "my heart, my soul, still holds the pen
    " absolutely.


  • NeonRose
    April 12, 2008

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    This is amazing! I love it all, in particular these lines: Haloed or hollow I have arrived at an end,
    beginning an odyssey An eery existence interprets this place Life leads me by the throat and when I scream for release, I choke on my words...

    Good luck in the contest.

  • DannySherwood
    April 12, 2008

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    Excellent

    This was a brilliant poem. Sometimes, I think we don't know where we're going in life. However, I think you've summed up the human experience. Great poem.


  • caos-cordura
    April 12, 2008
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    weell done


  • frownsnfreckles
    April 12, 2008

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    it certainly is a love hate relationship at times, almost as if the muse has to push us through a catastrophe of emotions to pull out the gems, yet we still reluctantly follow and wallow when it works!

  • cjenkins
    April 11, 2008
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    nice


  • RadioPJ
    April 10, 2008

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    5 BBKing Stars!

    I enjoyed this, and it makes me want to shout - yes, Law!
    "...paid your toll..." " "paid my dues..." qualified to sing the mystic blues


  • darell
    April 10, 2008

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    Creative!

    I loved this poem because it relates
    to the struggles of a poet.
    Our desire to create the quintessential
    write that expresses our thoughts with
    clarity and depth. To be able to draw
    the reader into your world to experience
    a perspective that is profound and unique.


  • grannyeri gold member
    April 10, 2008

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    Certainly a very unique way of writing about writing - just what the host wanted. Wish you well in this contest.

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