God is a kaleidoscope of able
He offers more than the salvation’s flight;
Looking through Him, I am surely stable
For He is with me in my earthly plight.
In His presence I am vulnerable
Yes I am weak but He provides me might,
And this feeling’s more than comfortable
Of being saved in my ancestral blight.
In His guidance my life is gullible
For I am trusting Him to do what’s right;
My faith on Him is not made of marble
But on His Word that exceeds the world’s height.
Yes he saved me from the hellish crumble
But He is more than my redemption’s light –
For His patterns are so incredible;
His colors are exceptionally bright.
He’s my warmth at cold; food on my table,
He’s my strength in sorrows; a friend in sight,
My cure in sickness; crutch when I stumble;
My everything to get me through the night.
In a list
A contest entry
- Jesus Beyond Savior by melphleg.
850 points, ended April 19, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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This really captured my attention, I loved your use of a kaleidoscope for description in this. Thanks for sharing!
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Yes he saved me from the hellish crumble
But He is more then my redemption light-
For his patterns are so incredible;
His colors are exceptionally bright.
exceptional write
God bless my friend...
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OK, I especially like the very last stanza for it gets at some of the specific things Jesus does now. The first stanza's do declare that he's more than a savior. The best imagery is in the first line after that the imagery if it exists at all is weak. I'm not sure I like the word "gullible" for it's usually connotation is not positive. It seems like a forced near rhyme to marble. Overall though this is one of the better pieces in the contest so far.
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