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Time is up

Two lines to see
two lines to tree
three are the lines
see the lines to see

Three are the lines to see
three are the lines to three
if I could I could and thats the end of three

Tolie is to lee to lie is to lee to lines is to three and thats the end of the tree

To lee to lie to lee to lie and I ain't in the tree to lie is to lee to lie is to lee and I ain't hiddin' and thats the end of the key

To lee to lee to lie is to lee and thats all I have to say to lee to lie to lee to lines in the fountian to lines is the way to key but I ain't nobody to lines is the way I see

To lee is to lee and thats the end of the tree.

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  • rhondasail
    April 13, 2008

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    Confusing and severely repetitious...

    I am not sure if it is a puzzle constructed throughout all of your poetry, or if you are making fun of poetry here onsite, or if there is some mathematical process you are trying to work out....there 'seems' to be some limited symbols or images you prefer to use in all of your writes...I am just lost as to what the meaning, if any, you are trying to portray or project...the only thoughts that came to my mind as I read some of your work was: " this could be a child writing rhyme, or that of someone with a disability"...I hope that is not offensive, it is not meant to be so, only what I thought as I read...Be well, Rhonda

  • Rowan gold member
    April 10, 2008
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    Sorry not what I'm looking for, one of the rules states no rhyme. But thanks for trying.


  • AbsoluteBrightness
    April 10, 2008
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    really confusing...