Wings whisper in a wash of love.
Sunlight dapples blossoms
letting colors resonate in the first blush
of morning. She unfolds from sleep,
brushes the dust of the last web of dreams
from her eyes, greets the rising light.
She takes our hearts and wraps
each one in the delights and pastel
colors of the love that spills
dances from her heart as she breathes
life’s subtle scents, and her hands
caress the offerings of each day’s joy.
Blessed are we, who can trace
her footsteps' impressions in the sandy
shores of our hearts' grace. She has
brought us gifts of butterfly laughter,
humming bird brilliance and flowered
the paths of our life in blossoming petals.
Share with me this day of celebration;
Dance with me in jubilation --
as we sign with joy, the day of her birth,
wish her all the blessings
we can lay upon her hearth -- knowing
we are happy every day she is in our hearts.
12:30 PM
In a list
A contest entry
- Pic Inspired for Poet2angels' Birthday by jasminerose.
850 points, ended April 20, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think, what it makes you feel, how you are moved.
Comments
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You spill your heart into every poem and we are the lucky recipients.... Another beauty!!! Congrats. on the HM too!!!
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My world is a grand and wonderous place because of the friends that fill it. There is nothing else I can say.
Love, Tom B.
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ooh how truly blessed she is to have all of you!
Another wonderful write in celebration
Love and Light
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Thanks. May the world bring blessings large and small to your door.
Love,
Tom B.
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Wonerfully Written !
This is a really beautifully and wonderfully written poem as well as very inspireing ! And so extreemly touching to. This is packed full of emotion , what a delightfull peice that you have done here. As though you have written it for or to someone whom is really special to you ! Colors of the love that spills dances from her heart as she breaths lifes subtle sents.Last but not least wish her all the blesings we can lay upon her hearth--knowing we are happy every day she is in our hearts....Also a favorite part in here of mine is the one. She has brought us gifts of Butterfly laughter*******Again Excellent Peice ! *******Brenda Gae
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thanks. I just wanted to make Lynda's birthday feel special. Hopfully, I did. Your comment makes me feel i more than succeeded. Thanks again.
Love,
Tom B.
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That beautifully expresses the love you have for whoever this gracious lady is. I love it.
V2: Should be 'breathes.'
You need a comma between 'scents' and 'and.'
V3: Should be footsteps' if you are talking about more than one footstep.
Should be hearts' if you are talking about the heart of more than one person.
Should be 'paths of our lives' if you are talking about many lives taking separate paths or 'path of our lives' if you mean many lives following one path.
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I agree with breathes, spelling error. I don't know why you put a comma between scents and and. I didn't even learn how to use punctuation till I was thirty and most of the rules have to many exceptions to make sense to me.
I understand the need for the plurals -- consistency in number.
"sign with joy" she is not deaf but I want that feeling in there, the sense of silence and yes also the signing of the birthday card. Call it poetic license in this case.
I ought to hire you. You're good. Thanks
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Hi, Tom! Here's the reason for the comma.
In English, there are two kinds of phrases, dependent clauses (sentence fragments) and independent clauses (complete sentences).
When an independent clause follows a conjunction, such as 'and,' a comma must precede the conjunction. When a dependent clause follows a conjunction, no comma is needed.
For example:
1. I bought Fancy Feast for my cat, but she refused to eat it.
('She refused to eat it' is a complete sentence. It contains a subject pronoun (She) and a verb (refused).)
versus
2. I bought Fancy Feast for my cat but forgot to put it in her bowl.
('Forgot to put it in her bowl' does not contain a subject noun of any sort; it only has the verb 'forgot.')
So, in your poem, you have:
She takes our hearts and wraps
each one in the delights and pastel
colors of the love that spills
dances from her heart as she breathes
life’s subtle scents,
(This, by the way, seems a little too long. You might consider breaking it up into two sentences, if you can.)
and her hands
caress the offerings of each day’s joy.
('Her hands caress the offerings of each day's joy' is a complete sentence.)
I hope that helps!
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it is funny, that I who am so analytical, do language and writing so much by feel. I can rarely step back and look analytically at my own writing until years have gone by. Poems erupt, are born, take me over and write themselves. Little happens that is cold, logical or weighed. Instead, it burns and dances it way through my soul and drains upon the page from my fingers. It is, almost, a gift to have someone like yourself provide a safe harbor of correctness that clarifies my grammer and parses the sentences so that everyone has greater access to the wonder of my heart. So yes, I thank you. Deeply and completely with all my heart, I cannot thank you enough.
Love,
Tom B.
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Awesome!
Tom,this is a nice! Good lyrical style from start to finish! I wish you all the best in the contest! Thanks again!
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Thanks. I love to celebrate someones natal day. Celebrate the gift they are to the world.
Peace & Light,
Tom B.
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Oh my that's so beautiful. I love how the words just flow in a happy rushing flow. Like smooth water over rocks. It is very lovely from begining to end. And such a wonderful poem to anyone having a child! =3
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every birthday is a time of celebration for it is the welcoming of the ones we love to another year of sharing and love. Advancement in age only recognized for all the rich and loving memories it represents. Thanks for stopping and taking the time to share your joy.
Love,
Tom B.
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'Wings whisper in a wash of love.'..lovely line.
Thank you for the read today.
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Thanks, Sandra. You know I do little. I only offer the people in the world around me to honor themselves and have respect for each other's dignity. In our hearts, given that we truly hold the world in the Light, we see how blessed we are by each person's life.
Love,
Tom B.
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Delaney stole my comment!! LOL!
Me too, I've missed you too, and count myself blessed to read such a lovely dedication. There are only a few people here that cross over to my "real" thoughts, and you are most definitely on that list, and this here's why..
Peace, my friend, and happy birthday Lynda.
Jin
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Thanks, my friend. I am finally learning the truth of what my grandmother taught me. Good manners and gracious behavior, in the end, create the greatest good will, because they benefit and and provide openess for the most people. It also allows me to listen to people and see the best in them. I am blessed by all of your kind thoughts.
Love, Tom B.
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I've missed you. I've missed
the softness of your writing...
shame on me for staying away...
this is so lovely it makes me
want to cry. I'm not kidding.
Love, Lane
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You are always welcome in my gardens. You should know that. I will always love you and you know that as well. This is just a present for a lovely lady. She deserves the best I have to give so I give it willingly. You know, I never do less.
Love,
Tom B.
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i really like this one, it's very classical~
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Glad I could provide a smile and touch a heart. Thanks for stopping by and sharing back the joy you caught.
Love, Tom B.
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oh this was a joy to read. the imagery is so wow.
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Glad you enjoyed my adventure to be more than a hallmark card. Wanted to spread a little joy to one who deserves far more.
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it was a total eye opener in ways. it was your style all in all. which i miss so much.
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I should have known.... Lynda, poet2angels, a smile of and to the heart! She does see the beauty of soul, "wings whispering in a wash of light."
A whisper of love, here, too, Tom. 
.... Happy birthday, Angel!
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You know, I love to celebrate a birthday when I can. If I can win a smile with my words then I surely will. I know her style and way of writing and know she has touched so many hearts, I could not pass up this opportunity to send back some of the love she has given me.
Love, Tom B. -
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Oh my goodness, such lovely heartfelt words for our dearest Lynda!! You have manage to capture the essence of all she gives from her beautiful heart.. I am going to have to pass the tissues to her on this one!!
So very lovely!!
Thank you for joining in and gifting Lynda this beautiful poem for her birthday!!
Jazzy
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Thanks, my dear. I sat with this contest for awhile before I thought of what could provoke a smile. From the sigh in her respone, I think I got all that I could want.
Love,
Tom B.
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oh my!
This was so touching, Tom...My sweet Bro You have made me smile and cry at the same time with such beautiful thoughts you pen ...This is so lovely...I can't say in words what this means..
TY, Bro!!!
Lynda
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