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I Need To Believe (Escape To Be Bound Series)

I need to believe that it wasn't for naught
That the powerful pleasures I patiently fought
Battle rhythms and rhymes of a whimsical thought
Beyond utterance, deliverance from what passion has wrought

I need to believe in tempestuous eyes
Piercing, engaging, revealing my lies
Stirring my soul to a fevered demise
For in death is found life when but love be the prize

I need to believe I will breathe once more
I need to believe and perceive as before
I need to believe and retrieve mi amour
I need to believe more to see and explore

Ecstatic emotion, erotic embrace
Hands clenched, bound tight, hearts jumping in pace
Waves of ecstasy crash and erase
The memory of time and confines of space
Forgetfulness be sweet by no steps to retrace
As our arms wind tight and our legs interlace
I need to believe there is worth in the chase
To escape to be bound in the world of Love's face

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  • sweet innocence
    May 8

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    ummm.... that was incredibly brilliant. just wow. I am honestly speechless.. That's what I'm looking for..
    Thanks for entering my contest and good luck


  • Sokarjo
    December 15, 2008
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    Great job! Very, very well-written piece. I enjoyed it immensely. Thanks so much for entering! :-)


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    November 19, 2008
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    Thank you for your most beautifully sensual entry, Josie


  • PureRomance
    November 18, 2008

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    I can't help but agree with the previous posters. You did an amazing job with this masterpiece and congrats on the trophies that you won on this. It was most defnitely deserved. Keep up the excellent work and thank you for adding this to the reading list in the group for all members to read. I liked it alot.


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    November 13, 2008
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    This was amazing. Very well written
    Your flow and rhyme scheme were flawless


  • Rose Angel gold member
    October 26, 2008

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    Wow dear friend...this is a masterpiece..Such powerful lines, rhyming, flow...powerful sensuous word play.....Terrific powerfly profoundly arduous love poem,,,,Nothing short of amazing..Bravo!


  • trekkergirl
    October 26, 2008

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    I really do like this one. I like the repeat words they work well with me. I like the choice of words you use. I like the background. There isn't anything about this poem that I don't like. Good write Good job. thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest!


  • Leonura
    October 22, 2008
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    How truly beautiful. Such emotion and love. makes a wee girl sigh.


  • Sheli silver member
    October 19, 2008
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    WOW!


  • God is my reality
    June 27, 2008

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    Omg, this is just amazing, it has like perfect rhythm and perfect rhyme and the flow is just so natural. This is beautifully written, and I loved how smart you sounded just by your creativity and intellectuality. This is way way good. Great job

    • deepheart
      June 27, 2008
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      Thank you for such wonderful words. I do ecnourage you to read the entire series.


  • Blooming Poet
    June 26, 2008

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    see normally for me at least I take on look at a rhyming poem and stick my nose up and say I am not going to read that. but for me somehow this poem didn't give me that feel at all


  • Image and Visions silver member
    June 21, 2008

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    well done

    Reading the series as I am it a very entertaining and enjoyable read that is well written and almost entralling what you've started with this/


  • Chelsea Void
    May 31, 2008
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    For the most part I thought the meter of this poem was spot on, except for a few places. And though it is a good piece of writing, it doesn't fall quite so well into what I'm looking for. For me it seemed to just list some memorable qualities rather than truly explore the meaning and feeling of unrequited. Great poem, just does not fit my contest.


  • ElijahsRaven
    May 26, 2008
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    A worthy entry

    Good luck in the contest!


  • shutter-bug
    May 16, 2008
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    this was a little too erotic, especially at the end. thank you for entering.


    • LaylaLace
      May 24, 2008
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      I disagree. I don't believe there was so much eroticy as there was sensuality. Your vivid words only hint at what might be. All one knows for sure what is going on is the two lovers lying next to each other, wanting each other.

      I love your use of rhythm and rhyme here, the form is constantly changing and deeply intriguing. I've read your other poems as well and each has awakened thoughts and feelings I thought I'd forgotten.


  • LeilaJayne
    May 10, 2008

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    Just a quick comment to say thanks for entering this into my contest, sorry you didnt win but obviously there can only be three trophies given, which is a shame cause in this contest there deserved to be alot more winners! xxx


  • LeilaJayne
    May 8, 2008
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    Nice work...Thanks for entering! x


  • whits end silver member
    May 3, 2008
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    BRAVO!!!

    The rhyme is incredible, just incredible! What a terrific poem of love!

  • JaneObsidian
    May 1, 2008
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    beautifuly written!


  • movedon
    May 1, 2008
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    an amazing write. well done

    miley


  • Mark McNulty
    May 1, 2008

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    Very strong write. Rhythmic and powerful, a true pleasure to read from beginning to end. I was quite impressed and glad I came across it. Excellent job.


  • sapphireangelwings
    April 30, 2008

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    I loved this for a number of reasons. The power in the words I NEED TO BELIEVE are so sweeping and dramatic, it is creative and emotionally charged as well. Good luck!


  • Peacegrove
    April 30, 2008

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    I like this a lot for the most part although the use of language isn't too exciting in a couple of places. On a side note, "mi amour" I am pretty sure is a mixture of several languages and you might want to look into that.
    It speaks well to the reader though.


  • corruptedsoul
    April 30, 2008
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    that was beautiful.

  • elmas
    April 30, 2008
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    very profound poem, lots of imager


  • Forever in his arms
    April 25, 2008
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    this is beautiful


  • SchizoChic
    April 19, 2008
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    Wow. Very nice.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    April 16, 2008

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    Beautiful and passionate poem you have penned here. Lots of imagery and emotion expressed with your words of love. Thanks for sharing & best of luck


  • RadioPJ
    April 14, 2008

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    I can feel your emotions, your passion, your need to believe. I join with you in the hope for rebirth of love's ecstacy and love's face.


  • Shassidy
    April 12, 2008

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    Great job with this piece! I really like the rhyming and flow in this. There was one line that I thought could use work because it didn't seem to fit the flow of the rest of the poem, line 3. I also like the word choice in this poem, it make the piece powerful. My favorite line is "I need to believe and retrieve mi amour" because I like the small usage of another language in this. Great job and good luck in the contest!


  • Angelflower
    April 11, 2008

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    Beautifully done!!! Bravo!!! This was so amazing.. The emotion behind it was truly beautiful..I am really speechless actually.. I feel like I'm rambling, bacause I am struck dumb by the magic in your words... Bravo!
    "I need to believe and retrieve mi amour"
    I hope that you did retieve it..
    Jetleena :


  • BarefootSoul
    April 11, 2008

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    I need to believe! The title says it all but then your poem has pierced the hidden emotion I've held, even from myself. You have such a beautiful grasp on love and passion. Each line is needed and each stanza. The poem seems to have a physical shape not sure if that was intended and I enjoyed how the second stanza changed. There is also such truth and wisdom here. With the second one listed below being full of hope, that is truly something to hold onto!! I was swept up in this poem and almost felt as if I was gently being held by your own hopes and desires. Beautiful, erotic thank you for your entry Suz

    For in death is found life when but love be the prize

    Waves of ecstacy crash and erase
    The memory of time and confines of space
    Forgetfulness be sweet by no steps to retrace

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