"I don't think outside the box."
I dance on the lines.
I become the dot.
I know my center.
I am the box.
Don't try to corner me on my ideas.
I've got all the angles worked out.
(I have lines of people waiting to listen.)
The multidimensionality of the box is
the square in three dimensions.
Two dimensions has transformed and become three
adding depth to what had no substance
Wooden, I may be. But cold I am not
Are you able to hold anything in your box?
Or, are you already filled?
Do you carry things?
Or, are you just carried around?
My box is filled with the toys of mind.
Ideas that spring to life when let out,
marching to a very different drummer.
So I got my dolls, toy soldiers, my train
and tea set.
At the end of the day my 'inner child',
knows well enough to
pack the box up
and store it back in the closet.
Author notes
Option 7
A contest entry
- THE box RESURFACEs by raw love.
775 points, ended April 14, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - What Is...? 10/20 by Gypsie Ink.
450 points, ended June 20, 2008, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Criticize freely, I need input to improve
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Great write! Love the concept. Congratulations on the Bronze!
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Fresh!
I love the direction of this....I also love the "multidimensionality of the box" Wonderful write! Thank you for entering and Best of luck! -
What a wonderful poem
Your words filled me with memories of that wooden toy box
and yes how we pack it away in the closet.
Only to open it up and think of those childhood times
Julie
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Much improved. Thanks for being open to critique. you jumped up to the challenge. very nice. If you would like me to help me judge your contest...I would be honored.
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I love
the brilliant questions asked.
the different thought patterns shown here.
however,
I find the background a bit distracting...had troubles not thinking about rug rats through your poem.
and some of the ideas appear a little bit conflicting at first, but it depends the angle you come at it with.
thanks for entering,
good luck,
deep one
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Thanks!
It's a multi round format. The first round is judged today. It is a 1500-3000 word essay. Some of this work is brilliant. The link is http://allpoetry.com/contest/2398041. If you can't judge today. Please, help me with rounds 2-5. All I ask is that you rate their works (with names or titles) 1st thru 8th. Thank you! -
Would you like to judge
My AP 'Philosopher Poet' contest? The way you picked apart my poem indicates skill in this type of work. If you help, I would be in debt to you
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