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Redemption Garnered

contemptuous waves

tumultuous seas

before me roil

 

nimble mind teeters

 

splatters of ink

drip from listless hands

conveyance of rage

tainted innocence

 

quill meets parched paper

crumpled with need

 

art of darkness

illuminates wanton heart

 

formidable words

seep from pinched pores

releasing toxins

 

redemption garnered~

 

 

Author notes

This is about as far out to the edge as I dare travel and I'm not even sure what I just wrote. Free verse is most difficult to me, so if this makes no sense to you what so ever... well cut me some slack...lol I am making an attempt at what is most difficult for me.. The art of "out of the box" free verse does not come easy to a meter and rhyme kind of gal...

No caps or punctuation intended... it is as is

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  • penman gold member
    July 11, 2008
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    Wonderful

    A very powerful creation for the contest. So very well done. Thank you for sharing


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    April 12, 2008

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    A dark ocean of needing to surrender to that art of darkness, indeed....really well written free verse...yes, yes, no punctuation needed as the liens and words themself give pause.


  • NeonRose
    April 12, 2008

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    Very strong write, indeed. I like these lines: "quill meets parched paper crumpled with need". Good luck in the contest.


  • PageTurner
    April 12, 2008

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    This hit me where I breathe...



    "formidable words
    seep from pinched pores
    releasing toxins"


    Brava, Scribe!

    ~ Nicky♥


  • wildfiredreamer
    April 10, 2008

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    I'll say this is interesting, and I think you did a good job of reaching out to the far edge. I won't say I can understand all of what you wrote yet. but much of it brings pictures to my mind. good luck in the contest.

    s


  • Malabu
    April 10, 2008

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    makes sense to me...I think ive written to the extream left of this wonderous writing..besides...Ive always thought...not that we can expect those who read our writings will understand what it is we are trying to express...but what it is that they who read the words draw their own pictures of understanding
    Mal


  • Sacred Ground
    April 10, 2008

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    This is very intense, deep, and unknowing. I have just started to dabble in free verse myself, and sometimes have no clue what I am writing, until I'm through and somehow it makes sense; ifthat makes any sense? Any way nice job!
    ~S~G~


  • ShelleyA gold member
    April 10, 2008

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    An interesting write. Intense. Deep expression of emotion. Good imagery, flow and tone. Vivid descriptives. Good word choice, nice alliteration and assonance. Well penned dear one. Best wishes in the contest.

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