Sometimes there are things that you can't control,
Everyone knows that night will turn to day,
No matter what you say the waves will roll,
No one asks why it just works out that way,
My love for you is like the sky at night,
Nothing at all can ever make it fade,
It glistens and twinkles it feels riht,
It's deep and dark but I am not afraid,
Scream Hallelujah beneath broken skies,
Love does not come with a gaurentee,
It leaves you with only hows and with whys,
I'll love you even if you don't love me,
This thing called love is oh so strange,
But one thing I know: my feelings won't change.
A contest entry
- love poems {750 points for gold} by risewiththesmoke.
1000 points, ended April 23, 2008, 36 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Romancing The Muse by 2lullabyhaven.
520 points, ended May 10, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Does the strict sonnet form distract from the emotions?
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we swear undying devotion to another in a temporal place in time, and fate moves the hands of sweet flesh away, as the clock ticks on, but can one ever truly erase such love, I think not, it is a vibrant part of our souls, until our soul parts. lovely wri
lovely write...thanks for your entry~~~Artis
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Very deep and effective, read my rules again because there is something you havnt put in authors notes
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Haha
That's such a good idea! there wer go... sorry I have the attention span of a small child! Hehe. Sorry about that!
Gold
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Yes, love is deep. Thanks for your entry
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well done for winning gold.... all the comments so far have been very encouraging and rightly so... these are hard to write and i commend u for doing so hugs and love Linda xxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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Thank you!
Thanks:-) I was actually jumping round the room like a fool when I found out! Haha x x x
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Beautiful poem. I agree with brad the bard, the rhyme is quite amazing but the meter is a little jerky. Great work though.
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A beautiful little sonnet. I really enjoyed reading it. The rhyme is effortlessly done, though the meter is a bit jerky. I especially love the line
"Scream Hallelujah beneath broken skies,"
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AWESOME. these are mad hard to write, i know from experience but this is... just so good. i think the last 2 lines could be revised a bit but otherwise, amazing write... thanks for entering
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Wow that's just what I've been feeling these past few days... and I've told him I'll love him even if he doesn't return the feelings... you've captured it with great imagery... comparing it to the sky... the thing that holds great wonder... great job and good luck!
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beautiful!
I so love this one!
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