Open my soul--
Watch my imperfections drain...
But no matter how much I bleed
They're still there.
WHY WON'T THEY LEAVE?!
Crying on a rainy day
The mundane clouds cover the beautiful sky
Even she cries...
Looking at myself in a mirror--
Tempts me to grab a knife.
Fuck my wrists...
Let's go for my heart.
It's vast land--
Once so full of love
Now full of apathy.
He's gone.
Never to return.
What about skating?
What role does that play now?
Kristen yells...
It's all my fault...Once again...
Nothing changed.
The mirror tells no lies.
Grasp the knife--
Plunge it deep...
Kristen's voice spirals downward
Down, down to the off-white carpet.
His voice is halted.
I leave this obese body...
As the blood drips.
1...
Goodbye...
2...
3...
Blackness.
Author notes
Written December 10th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- *CuTtErS AnD SuICiDeS* by starryeyes17.
300 points, ended December 25, 2003, 41 entries
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Wow I really like this. It has some powerful emotions. Great write I really relate in someways. Good luck –gina.
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amazing
oh man this poem makes me grab and cover my heart -
wow..another personal write..i really enjoyed this poem...i wish you didnt have all the pain you do
...dont let things people say though or what they do, get you down...they aren't worth it as i have said before....very goodluck to you! 
great write...-lindsey
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In agreement with Raven Aurora
I gotta agree with Raven Aurora. *See: "...they have no power over you..."* This is very true. I had to learn this the hard way, but I did. Now, you need to believe this, regardless of whether or not this piece is actually your thoughts about killing yourself manifested, or just an exploration. ...Though suicide is no laughing matter.
- -Welcome to the edge of the universe. (Thirty seconds to mars.)- -
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A Jorb Well Done.
>_< Suicide. It's a killer. (Sorry, lame joke, there.) ...At least that's what I'm thinking this poem is about. I really liked how capitalized the angriest, and possibly loudest, emotion, and counted down to blackness, or death whichever you might prefer, at the end of this piece. Great job babe, and keep up the good work!
- -I'm not a patriot; I'm an American. (Thirty Seconds to Mars.)- -
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Awwwww!! ANA! NOOOOOO! You better be joking..
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This was a good write, though, hun!! Take your anger out with skating!!
<3 Sarah -
AHHHH NO NO NO NO NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I already have to deal with my bestfriend and his cutting and his siter trying to kill herself, I don't need to be worrying about you!!! You better just be talking about it and not doing it or I will get you help!!!!!!! I did it to my friends and I'll do it to you to!!! ok I'm done venting...But I guess writting that out has helped me a lot.
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My life was shitty for the last 20 years.
That is before Monday, December 8, 2003.
On my birthday, when I turned 21, I made a resolution to myself to not allow people to control my emotions and fuck me over anymore. I also said that I wouldn't allow my melancholia to cement and become my demeanor. I could sit here, my dear, and tell you any of a billion and one stories about the terrors and hardships I have suffered in life. I have been homeless before, raped twice, sexually abused and molested, abandoned, and taken advantage of at every turn. I've been insulted, broken down, stomped on, spit on, kicked, beaten, crucified (though not literally), and suffered every and any kind of mental adulteration you can think of. These people who put you down just because you are different from them--they have no power over you. The only reason they do it is to pump themselves up and make it seem like they are better because of their own insecurities. I have learned the ropes of human nature, honey. And while it is cruel, do not succumb to such pitiful, insolent imbeciles! While you're at it, tell them that if they bother you one more time that I, the Avenger of the Downtrodden, is coming to kick their asses! But I said all of that to say this--I know exactly where you are coming from. But you are strong, and you will make it, because it is only those who are fortified in heart and spirit that survive. And if you weren't a survivor, you would not still be here today.
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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My dear girl, it is not your fault no matter what she or anyone has to say. Please please don't leave here you have a great life ahead of you wether you think so or not. Everyone has imperfections, noone is perfect no matter how they seem.
Looking at myself in a mirror--
Tempts me to grab a knife.
Fuck my wrists...
Let's go for my heart.
It's vast land--
Once so full of love
Now full of apathy.
He's gone.
Never to return.
trust me i know how this is because look at my shitty summer, I know it sux because this feeling is not a good one but always remember I am here for you to talk to because we have gone through so many things alike. No matter what I love you and think you are just perfect for you. Don't listen to what Mark said or what Brittney was saying today, they don't know anything about you. You will always be my gurl. Great job on writings this and showing your emotions.
Keep up the great writes
Gem -
ooooooo very good very good i liked it :-)!
"I leave this obsess body...
As the blood drips.
1...
Goodbye...
2...
3...
Blackness. "
^^ Best lines i think :-) ggood job keep up the good work
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