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Healing Resentment (Gregorian Spanish Sonnaiku/Acrostic)

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~by Gregg Rowe~

 

 

hospital halls, vacated now by me

each day of survival gives me insight

almighty power opened doors of light

lest love my abuser will set me free

imagine fist fights/broke ribs/heart -- these three

notable offences :  -- today my plight

gratiously forgive him -- it's my right

remember words like "love" is strong for thee



erie black evenings

shadowed silhouttes leashed

ethereally espied



now with the help -- rehab -- live day by day

to move forward -- pass pasts -- with my life's dents

mentoring myself -- step by step -- new way:

envy, anger, plus hate I have now sent --

negated -- pit of abyss -- peace now stays

this time I live, henceforth, present moment

 

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  • Blankscreen2222
    October 23, 2008
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    I loved this.

    Very philosophical and an enjoyable read too.

    Georgina.


  • poetryality silver member
    October 23, 2008
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    Everything in life is a process. Sometimes we all need to be reminded of that fact. One day, one moment, one step at a time is all any of us have. I love what you did with this acrostic, and I know you know. The best to you in the contest and living a light-filled life!



    Always ♥

    Renee


  • Maureen silver member
    October 22, 2008

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    Hi Gregg,

    Now..this moment..is all we're ever sure of. Making the most of each moment is the best that we can do.

    There is much wisdom in your poem!

    Best Wishes!
    Maureen


  • hugh wyles silver member
    October 22, 2008
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    Dear Gregg,
    The picture you have used is apt: "The Scream",
    although we know your suffering's no dream.
    For those who know, your pain is all too real
    which patience, time and love we hope will heal.

    Your painting and your verse will serve to save
    your sanity. The spirit still is brave
    and, when your time of suffering is through,
    we'll fill the cup and drink a toast to you.

    Your fine acrostic sonnaiku has bent
    the meter, though expressing what you meant.
    The varied stress in alternating lines
    to give the sense of suffering combines
    and so, although it breaks with certain laws,
    your sonnaiku is worthy of applause.



    Good luck in the voting, Hugh (R.)


  • J aime Coudre silver member
    October 22, 2008

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    What an emotional poem you have left here for Queen Edna...I like the style though not being an expert on poetry types I do not know where the mistakes are... it just looks and sounds good to me...


  • MargaretG
    October 22, 2008
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    Love is the healing force of the world - through love we make the best of what we have, and laugh at what would otherwise make us cry.
    It's good to be reminded of your poem, Gregg, thank you for entering this latest contest.


  • Terry-too silver member
    April 25, 2008

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    Gregg, I'm glad I came back and spent the past hour here, in thought and in reading the thoughts of others and realize what a powerful amassador of healing and forgiveness you are. So much of what is posted in a site like this has no value beyond the time of its writing, and I count my own among them. This has enduring value, not only about what you endured and have not only survived (many do not) but with your writing you lead others who need help into directions where healing happens.
    Masterly writing, originality of form, and hope are the literary and personal qualities of value here!

    Thank you!
    Terry


    • Terry-too silver member
      April 25, 2008
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      Glitch!

      amBassador ambassador ambassador ambassador ambassador ambassador ambassador ambassador

      (It did not open to permit me to correct the typo.)


  • Hinemoa silver member
    April 21, 2008
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    Dear Gregg,

    Wonderful my dear friend. The pain you go through must be very unbearable at times and I'm proud of you for making the effort to write a poem to leave on Allpoetry. I'm very pleased though that it's not closing down, let's hope it doesn't give Kevin the idea of buying a lottery ticket in the hope that he will win.
    Love Hine


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    April 19, 2008

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    excellent~

    I have never heard of this type form before until now
    You have did wonderful with this....an it was a pleasure to read....
    Best of luck in the contest....
    I just posted mine do hope you drop by and give it a look see
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


  • hugh wyles silver member
    April 12, 2008

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    Dear Gregg,

    The picture you have used is apt: "The Scream",
    although we know your suffering's no dream.
    For those who know, your pain is all too real
    which patience, time and love we hope will heal.

    Your painting and your verse will serve to save
    your sanity. The spirit still is brave
    and, when your time of suffering is through,
    we'll fill the cup and drink a toast to you.

    Your fine acrostic sonnaiku has bent
    the meter, though expressing what you meant.
    The varied stress in alternating lines
    to give the sense of suffering combines
    and so, although it breaks with certain laws,
    your sonnaiku is worthy of applause.

    Good luck in the voting, Hugh (R.)


  • Lucy.
    April 11, 2008
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    I think you've made this work very well. I especially like the last line. Nice write.


  • CountryCousin
    April 11, 2008

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    Pretty darn good.

    I think that you did capture the point of the painting. And then again you painted the picture all over again with just these words in an accrostic.


  • Emotions Muse
    April 11, 2008
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    I have to say I wasn't too sure how a sonnet and haiku mix would turn out but I am pleased to see how you made it work here, very well done. This poem speaks to every person in some way and I think that that gives it even more appeal. wonderful piece thanks for sharing!<3 less

  • josemb40
    April 11, 2008
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    nice

    i liked it


  • Nevel
    April 11, 2008

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    Well, surely it's a very interesting write, blended into a form I never saw. Personally I'm not fond of your mix of sonnet and haiku, since they are totally different form-poems with a different history, culture and meaning. I like the way you express your creativity, and your dealing what has happened to you. It's a whole journey you describes Good luck in the contest


  • borrowing.moonlight gold member
    April 11, 2008

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    amazing

    this is absolutely beautiful. i love the format - it caught my attention wonderfully. i absolutely love your use of vocabulary it adds flair. in my own response to the previous comment, i want to say i don't think the author was referring to a person but rather using "abuser" as a metaphor. i could be wrong but that's my take on it.
    honestly, i just think this is an amazing piece and keep writing!!!


  • lullabyegurl
    April 11, 2008
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    great

    this is great!! a little scary but great. i love it but do u really have an abuser??? proberebly not but i dont wanna be rude, when i got to the 5th line i actually felt the pain it emphisises!!! good work i really love it!!! xx (soz i put kises on every comment i leave!!)


  • stani
    April 11, 2008
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    nice, wonderful flowto this write! i like it!


  • lostangel07
    April 11, 2008
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    wow..this page just randomly came up when I clcked home...but I like it!


  • BarefootSoul
    April 11, 2008

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    I hate, that I hate, that I resent.

    This topic is actually what is on my heart tonight and the thing I've been praying about the most. The last six lines are powerful and where I am at presently. I've found myself feeling anger but resentment didn't occur to me and this helps. I've forgiven and let go hundreds of times and yet the pain of harboring these very feelings you wrote on still haunt me. They are not as easy to rid oneself of as one might think. Your poem is a rare topic and written well in the form you used. I wonder if the healing and letting go is something one can only do if the cycle of its cause is gone? I often wish I had someone to talk to on such matters but I presume it is a personal experience. Thank you for writing this and putting it where it could be found! Suz


  • dustookie2
    April 11, 2008
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    Have no idea how i got here but hey i did..


  • lordoftherings gold member
    April 10, 2008
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    PS:

    Do you know there is a town in the states called Manasse:

    "Hooowdiiiee folks, howdiiee, I'm from Manass,
    anybody from Uranus!

    Gregg (giggling) -- actually more than giggling


  • angelica silver member
    April 10, 2008

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    Dear Gregg, Knowing what you've gone through the years I've known you and before that makes this a wonderful testimony to leave on AP so others may feel your pain.
    Wonderfully written my dear Brother.
    Love always Joan


  • Yemassee gold member
    April 10, 2008

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    I of course don't know your history, and I guess I don't need to because the poem tells me enough. It speaks of the hurts, the injuries (physical and mental) ans the slow road to acceptance and recovery.

    Also I don't know how much is literal, and how much figurative, and once again, it doesn't matter.

    What I like, taking into account the constraints of the contest, is how you've left as a testament of the past, but a declaration for the future, and of course it's a poem even more about where you are heading, than from where you've been.

    I'm no judge of poetry but I liked the sandwiching of the haiku with the sonnet, and more important than the mere idea of it, is that it worked without being awkward.

    This is exactly the kind of poem I hoped people would enter...just a chance to look in the mirror, or deeper and express what you see/feel. Thanks.


    • lordoftherings gold member
      April 10, 2008
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      Hpw Dp I Say This...Hmmm?!

      Dear Yamasee:

      Thank you so much for your comments on blank space. What is there and what is not there on the white page.

      Also thank you so much for intrigating the voice of the poem. Sometimes I wish readers would think outside of the box and not think of the "I" as me, the author; but the "I" in the poem is the speaker. This is what I strive to universally incorporate in my poems. So that the reader can relate to an interpersonal experience and bring in thier interpratation of the poem.

      But yet, enough of that. What I really want to say is that I don't want to be remembered for this poem's content as my whole autobigraphical library of poetry, actually I think it's a 8 1/2 (at least one thing I'll go down in record for as a porn star) (giggling) I want to be remembered that I outbeat Shakespeare (dream on ,bud) with this new form of poetry!

      Gregg

      A Happy United Poet's Month to All


  • Maureen silver member
    April 10, 2008
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    Great acrostic and sonnaiku! You've come a long way to arrive at your present, peaceful moment. Congratulations! Very nicely done!

    Best of Luck in the contest!

    <3 Maureen


  • MargaretG
    April 10, 2008

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    You address some deep questions here, how to overcome injuries in the past and find peace in the present. This is an important issue for individuals, and nations too. The elements that make it work are "with help", "day by day" and "mentoring myself" toward a better ideal. The lines made of small phrases are different, but the sonnet and haiku within the acrostic are a demanding form which you use well. One note "graciously". Best of luck, Gregg!


    • lordoftherings gold member
      April 10, 2008
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      Margaret:

      As always, you bring insight into my poetry and spill it with your words.

      Yet, I will have to argue with you on this point...
      I really meant "gratiously" and not "graciously"; and I hope you will accept graciously my argument between the two refinig definitions!

      Gregg

      • MargaretG
        April 11, 2008
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        Deo gratias - I found a reference. Thanks for the new word, Gregg.


  • darell
    April 10, 2008

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    Powerful

    nothing is more meaningful than the
    power to forgive. We're deeply emotional
    creatures who wound easily. Betrayal is
    worst than physical abuse. It takes alot
    of courage and character to free someone
    of their sins. Good work.


  • Edited
    April 10, 2008
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    A really interesting read.
    different, creative, wierd (in a good way) and more.
    Time well spent.


  • grannyeri gold member
    April 10, 2008

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    Quite the forms you have brought together in this poem, can see the acrostic, the haiku and the rhythm and rhyme in part of this. Good flow anad thoughts shared as well.


  • Lotus-Mama
    April 10, 2008

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    Nice write! I love the title, drew me in! I think the form work great for this one! Vivid images and emotion- thanks for sharing!!!


  • frownsnfreckles
    April 10, 2008

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    all healing begins with releasing resentment. It isn't always easy to forgive, when I can't I ask that God may do the forgiving for me instead and free me to go on loving. One step at a time teaches us to walk again.
    Good luck


  • ourgirlFriday
    April 10, 2008

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    Wonderful!

    I can relate to the recovery/healing/grieving process. I love the last line, even the middle which seems to me unevenly placed in the balance. But then again, that's what the poem's expressing, right? Very good job in all!

  • mmook
    April 10, 2008

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    well Done! excellent.. i found this piece of art with great imagery and awesome flow.. the last line .. i try to live for the moment... thanks for sharing


    • lordoftherings gold member
      April 10, 2008
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      You misquoted the last line..giggling..it reads:

      This time I live, henceforth, present moment

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