A celebration
you lying draped over the table
A knife loaded with sweetness
Subtle flow of virgin white
soft and sticky
Cupcake nipple teases
I want a bite
A candle lit
The point hovers and wax spills
I press and you gasp
Author notes
Happy Birthday!
A contest entry
- . by Aurora Ceres.
1000 points, ended April 11, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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lol - congrats on the silver
am glad that Ash enjoyed it
forever Yours, -
WOW.. this is very hot. I like this a lot actually. though I must admit I will never look at a cupcake the same again. very vivid imagery. outstanding job on this poem
good luck
kat
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Thanks
If I have twisted the way you look at something innocent then My work here is done ...
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Ummmm, this is so hot. As always you impress me with the hot hot hot images you bring forth seemingly casually. I loved this and I am sure it could be quite entertaining in the flesh too ...
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I am planning it for someone else's birthday ...
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imPRESSive. Your imagery says it all, I needn't say more.
eg
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Thank you for your comment
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woah
It's like you read my mind..
Now I have to write about something else. lol
Seriously very nicely penned!
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LOL
Glad you liked it, good luck with getting your mind into another gear
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What a birthday wish!!! I just love what you can do with only a few words. The imagery is awesome but it always is. LOL
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LOL
I am Tattboy.
You normally correspond with Tattboyspet!
My pet belongs to Me, this isn't her
Thank you for your praise, My pet is so good at these short contests that I am proud to have been mistaken for her!
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well done -- i love the play on words.... taking something so innocent as a cup cake ----
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Actually I was talking about treating someone (who is probably not innocent) LIKE a cupcake
But thanks for the comment, I am glad you enjoyed it.
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roflmao!!!!!
hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha ... oh my! i'm at a loss!
This is the BEST birthday gift ... ~counting on fingers to how long MY birthday is~
damn! You ARE good aren't You???
i love You!
forever Yours,
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I thought you didn't like needles
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There's a knife, nipples being bitten and wax being dripped ... i didn't even SEE needles in there!!!
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How else would I get the candles to stick?
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ummmmm .... double sided tape?????
or, or, or ... even BETTER ... spoon some wax on and then push the candle into the wax and cool it with ice so that it will stay
seriously, this is a BRILLIANT idea - lmao! Now i can tell Ash she's not only a Lizardess and a milktart, but she's a birthday cake too!!!
LOVED THIS!!!
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